Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Menugg

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Menugg

• Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:01, March 14, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: My favourite of the UA characters

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:51, March 15, 2014 (UTC)
2. Winterz (talk) 23:30, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
3. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 17:59, April 11, 2014 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:42, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
5. JangFett ^(Talk) 19:00, April 13, 2014 (UTC)

Object

• The only thing I would do is to mention his success with women in the P&t. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:21, March 14, 2014 (UTC)
  • Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:01, March 15, 2014 (UTC)

Ecks Dee

• Alphabetize your categories. 1358 ^(Talk) 09:53, March 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Oops, fixed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:01, March 15, 2014 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

• I noticed a few things that you left out from the book:
  • It mentions that he was initially pleased with his life on Gamorr.
    • Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • He didn't regret leaving Gamorr.
    • Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • His RPG stats show that he was a pilot.
    • Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • This is more for the BTS, but it mentions that during the Rise of the Empire era or the New Republic era that he could work as a bodyguard for a noble or politician.
    • Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
      • You made a mistake here, it is supposed to be New Republic era not Rebellion era.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 20:07, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
        • Fixed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:32, March 30, 2014 (UTC)
• Ereen Agar's entry in The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia establishes that Vurrha Chur operated during the Galactic Civil War. You can use this to state that Menugg worked for Chur around the time of the Galactic Civil War. It won't help you pin down the exact era, but you can use it for a BTS note as well as in the body.
  • I'm not sure we can say Menugg worked for Chur around the time of the war just because Chur was active then. Menugg could of started working for him at any time before or after. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
    • Yeah, you have a point, but I still think that you might note that Chur was active during the Galactic Civil War in the BTS. It kind of provides a timeframe for Menugg's service with Chur.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 20:07, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
      • Ok added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:32, March 30, 2014 (UTC)
• I would mention explicitly that he only spoke Gamorrean. (which is the way the book refers to the language)
  • Fixed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
• His image was illustrated by Daniel Falconer.
  • Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
    • Uh, I think you made a mistake there. The guy you linked to was a BioWare game designer.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 20:07, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
      • Ooops, fixed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:32, March 30, 2014 (UTC)
• "and many female companions visiting his bed" It doesn't explicitly state this that I can see; just that he was successful with Gamorrean females. It is probably best to leave it ambiguous.
  • Changed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
• Even though the book refers to him as hired muscle, I think it would be best to use a synonym.
  • Is mercenary ok? Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
    • Mercenary would is fine.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 20:07, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
• "although his allegiance could be swayed by someone with a much larger wallet." Could you word this more formally?
  • Changed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
• "He planned to one day use his riches to retire to Gamorr and build a large home for him and a family to live in." I think this might belong more in the biography section.
  • Moved. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
• I'll look the article over again once you are done with these.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 03:28, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks! I see you've added a redlink for melee combat, do we really need a page for that? If I have to create it it's going to need an awful lot of sources and a lot of other pages need to be linked to it. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:22, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
    • Sorry, my mistake.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 20:07, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
• You use eventually two sentences in a row in the intro, please vary your word choice.
  • Done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:32, March 30, 2014 (UTC)
• I think you have enough information related to skills and abilities in the P&T to have a separate Skills and abilities section. Things that would be moved would be information about the languages he spoke, his combat skills, as well as his piloting ability. The part about him enjoying melee combat should stay in the P&T, but you should mention that he was skilled in melee combat in the new section. You could also mention that he knew how to use armor effectively in the skills and abilities section.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 20:07, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • Split. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:32, March 30, 2014 (UTC)

Toprawa

• I think you may be misusing the adjective "incredible," which shouldn't necessarily be used as a synonym for "very." You use it twice throughout the article: "he was incredibly well paid" and "Menugg was incredibly loyal to Chur". Does the source actually use the term "incredible"? If not, please find more appropriate adjectives to use. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 02:07, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • Changed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:01, April 13, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:22, April 13, 2014 (UTC)

• Please note that the "Powers and abilities" section is only applied to force-sensitive characters. ;) Winterz (talk) 23:28, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
  • Oops, thanks for fixing it. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:01, April 13, 2014 (UTC)