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Mazi

  • Nominated by: ToRsO bOy (talk) 12:03, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
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(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

  1. ACvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 21:03, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
  2. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 16:49, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
  3. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 17:24, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
  4. — Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 17:58, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
  5. ACvote I've sadly only read up to the I think third novel of Rebel Force, so you're going down a path I cannot follow if you intend to nom articles through the whole of the series :P OOM 224 18:19, 29 April 2022 (UTC)

Object

Fan
  • You can date the destruction of Alderaan to 0 BBY Fan26 (Talk) 14:42, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Added and sourced. Thanks! ToRsO bOy (talk) 05:55, 28 January 2022 (UTC)
      • Firstly that date ref needs some linking, second it needs to explain how Alderaan's destruction took place in 0 BBY Fan26 (Talk) 19:57, 5 February 2022 (UTC)
        • Updated and linked. ToRsO bOy (talk) 15:40, 15 February 2022 (UTC)
          • I think you should rearrange the wording of that sentence in the body so it places the event a day before the destruciton, *then* provides the date Fan26 (Talk) 19:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Does the source actually state that his talent was natural?
    • Just reviewed and it didn't. I've removed the word. ToRsO bOy (talk) 15:40, 15 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Please fix the contraction(s). JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 22:47, 14 February 2022 (UTC)
    • Sorry, can you give an example of this? Thanks. ToRsO bOy (talk) 15:40, 15 February 2022 (UTC)
      • "They're" in the P+T. Formal writing forbids such contractions. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 15:41, 15 February 2022 (UTC)
        • Got it. Updated! Also, can I interest you in reviewing Jez as well? :) ToRsO bOy (talk) 02:32, 18 February 2022 (UTC)
          • I certainly may but note that it is considered improper to ask for reviews; everything gets looked at eventually. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 06:22, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
            • Sorry, forgot about that rule. Won't happen again. ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:46, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Context for Alderaan should be added to the intro.
  • Context needed for Delaya in intro and body.
  • I think we can subsection the bio into two sections of two paragraphs each.
  • An Equipment section to detail the weapons used would be appreciated. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 15:52, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
  • It's unclear what this "chamber" you speak of is. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 16:02, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Who is this "ringleader?" Would that be Halle Dray?
    • She's one of them. I added her name into the article for clarity. ToRsO bOy (talk) 11:05, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
  • I don't think it's necessary to mention this his physical attributes are "according to Solo." JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:27, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
Spooky
  • Equipment unsourced.
  • "Jez and Lan didn't think our parents would agree, but I talked 'em into it." -Mazi. It refers to them as friends before this, but consistenly as 'brothers' after Han learns this information, and since Mazi refers to them as our parents, can they be established as brothers?
    • You know what... I'm stunned I didn't catch on to this before. Now it makes complete sense that the three of them were brothers. I've edited the article to reflect this. Nice catch! ToRsO bOy (talk) 07:23, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Han does establish that "The oldest couldn't be more than fifteen, if that." That can give some dating context to when they were born, even if it's a bit of a range.
  • The text does describe his skin shade as pale, which can be added.
    • Added description on a new line. ToRsO bOy (talk) 07:23, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
  • It's mentioned one of the garments he was wearing has pockets (which he stuffed credits into). A small detail, but one that can be mentioned in equipment.—spookywillowwtalk 15:53, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
    • I feel like that's pushing equipment too far. Sorry, do we have any other GA's that does this too? ToRsO bOy (talk) 07:23, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Hmm, the main reason I mentioned it is because, having an occupation as a thief, it'd make sense if the pickpocketer had garments that had pockets, which it notes him to have. I did find some examples that list the pockets/pouches (and sometimes colors of) within FAs: Krix, Ruescott Melshi, Moroff) —spookywillowwtalk 18:57, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
        • Appreciate you taking the time to explain and provide samples. I've added a link for clothing since there wasn't a specific one for pants. ToRsO bOy (talk) 11:05, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
  • "Mazi was a Human male who lived on..." - It might be better to establish that Mazi's homeworld is Alderaan in the prose earlier then when it gets linked way down in the skills section. I'm aware the photo caption does say that, but the body itself only says he lived on Alderaan.—spookywillowwtalk 18:57, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Good point. I've moved the link. Let me know if the wording is ok. ToRsO bOy (talk) 11:05, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
  • It seems like there's enough content notability to make articles for, then link—the memorial hosted (as an event), the memorial's chamber as a location, and Organa's mission to Delaya (probably pipelinked to 'visit'), and his mother (the one mentioned in Lan's top quote).—spookywillowwtalk 02:39, 7 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Created the pages and linked them accordingly. ToRsO bOy (talk) 08:38, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • A tiny bit of context on Ferus Olin in the introduction would be nice.
  • The introduction is a bit sparse at the moment. The Organa-being-captured incident would warrant a mention.
  • "Mazi had a talent of convincing people into agreeing with him." Is this based on him convincing his parents once? If so, it sounds a bit speculative.
    • I added that it was Lan's belief. Let me know if that's alright. ToRsO bOy (talk) 16:08, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
  • In the Skills and abilities section, you have two consecutive sentences that start with "When". Can we get some variation? 1358 (Talk) 16:45, 21 April 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:19, 29 April 2022 (UTC)