- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Lumiya's datapad
- Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 Thursday, February 24, 2011, 02:57 UTC
- Nomination comments: More golden straw. I literally thought this up last night, wrote it in the last hour, and transformed it from an expected CAN to a GAN. Sheesh. What an intense twenty four hours.
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Support
Your guys' sigs are making my eyes bleed. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:03, February 25, 2011 (UTC)- Master Jonathan (Council Chambers) Saturday, February 26, 2011, 00:28 UTC
- Per Toprawa. 1358 (Talk) 20:45, February 28, 2011 (UTC)
- I could look at this golden straw all day long. Your sigs, on the other hand… ;) Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 22:17, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
Grunny (talk) 01:17, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
Object
From the Council Chambers:
"The self-destruct mechanism, which would also disperse the gaseous poison when activated, was so rigged to breach the air duct by which it was located,": Is there a reason for having the word "so" stuck in there? Right now, it seems extraneous.- Addressed.
"Its only fleeting mention occurs in chapter thirteen." Chapter 13 of what? The book or the audio version? Please clarify.- Addressed.
- Looked better with your change, but I went ahead under {{Sofixit}} and changed "book" to "audiobook" to make it even clearer. Feel free to tweak or revert if you feel that doesn't work. Master Jonathan (Council Chambers) Saturday, February 26, 2011, 00:28 UTC
- Addressed.
- Neat little article. Master Jonathan (Council Chambers) Friday, February 25, 2011, 04:36 UTC
- The one time I don't come to you beforehand, I wind up with objections :P Thanks for the review, MJ. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy 9281 Friday, February 25, 2011, 12:22 UTC
- I was drawn in by the "Did you know?" hook, otherwise I probably wouldn't have even known about it. :) Master Jonathan (Council Chambers) Saturday, February 26, 2011, 00:28 UTC
Toprawa
The "by which" is kind of reading strange to me here. Can we tweak this at all? "was rigged to breach the air duct by which it was located"- Addressed.
Would a link be appropriate for this individual, or at least a redlink? "were discovered by the Neimoidian maître d’hôtel"Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:37, February 25, 2011 (UTC)- Redlink created, I'll flesh it out when I get home. Thanks for the review, Tope. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy 9281 Friday, February 25, 2011, 19:59 UTC
- That's it, nice work. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:03, February 25, 2011 (UTC)
- Redlink created, I'll flesh it out when I get home. Thanks for the review, Tope. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy 9281 Friday, February 25, 2011, 19:59 UTC
Grunny
One question: would it be appropriate to create an article for Lumiya's apartment? If so, since it would be in the intro, it would need to be created, even if only a stub.Other than that, clean as a whistle. :) Grunny (talk) 05:33, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:17, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
- A recommendation for the infobox usage. I don't feel like the "Manufacturer" or "Created" fields quite fit for the information regarding Lumiya's modifications. Instead, the template could just as easily include a specific field for this information, much like the Individual ship infobox does. See: "modifier=" field, which reads as "Modified by" when used. See this article's infobox as an example of this in use. I'd say go ahead and tweak the template accordingly. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:52, February 25, 2011 (UTC)