Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Logray's ceremonial wand

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Logray's ceremonial wand

  • Nominated by: LelalMekha 15:25, June 12, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: First nominated as a CA, but has become too long.

(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 15:51, June 12, 2012 (UTC)
  2. ACvote—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 23:03, June 16, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:39, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 01:43, July 7, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 01:06, July 19, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Menkooroo (talk) 02:09, July 19, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • If there is more than one magic wand in existence as indicated by the article, then would and article on them in general be warranted?
    • I was thinking about that. We've seen various characters using "magic wands" in Ewoks-related stories: the Leaf Queen seems to have one, and you also have those Healing wands. --LelalMekha 12:57, June 13, 2012 (UTC)
      • I think a magic wand article would be prudent then, which would then link to the various wands in use throughout canon. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:39, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
        • I've just created the magic wand article. I'll try and expand it soon. --LelalMekha 10:19, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • "confirmed magician" - this phrasing seems a little odd; do you mean something like "trained magician" or inexperienced magician"?
    • Well, I mean Teebo had just began his training, so yes, he wasn't properly trained and had no experience. I could change that bit, if you like. --LelalMekha 12:57, June 13, 2012 (UTC)
  • Did Teebo suffer any punishment from Logray for the breaking of his wand? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:32, June 13, 2012 (UTC)
    • As far as I can tell, the story does not address this issue. The wand simply "vanishes" from the story. --LelalMekha 12:57, June 13, 2012 (UTC)
Return of the Jedi
  • Throughout the article, you seem to indicate that the name of the wand is conjectural. If that is indeed true, you'll need to add a conjectural template.
    • The name is no conjecture. It's called "Logray's ceremonial wand" in the young readers' book. --LelalMekha 20:46, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
      • Using such phrases as "A ceremonial wand..." and "The ceremonial wand..." makes it sound like the title is conjectural. In instances like that, you should specifically call it "Logray's ceremonial wand," since that is its actual name.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 20:51, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
        • I can fix that if you wish. I just wanted to avoid being too repetitive. The article is not very long, and I thought it was a good idea to use substitutes. --LelalMekha 20:57, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
          • You can still leave most of your substitutes. I mainly want to see the first bolded instance worded as its exact title, and also to have you mention its full real name at the beginning of the History. It may take a little rewording, but its real title should be used at least once in the intro and History.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 21:01, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
            • There you are. --LelalMekha 21:12, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • Context for Galactic Civil War in the History.
    • Fixed. (If that's enough, otherwise let me know.) --LelalMekha 20:46, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • Good work.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 20:33, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
What would Ollivander say?
  • The mention of the Death Star's destruction in the intro comes off as a bit strange. It's not repeated in the article body; could the intro not just say "around 3.5 ABY" like the body does? It's more accurate dating than "sometime before the Death Star's destruction," too.
  • In either the episode or the children's book, does anything happen after the wand breaks that would be relevant to this article? Does Logray get mad at Teebo; does he forgive him? If the wand's breakage has any sort of impact on their relationship or on later events, it would definitely be relevant to note.
    • Added (though I had to add bits of information not pertaining to the wand). --LelalMekha (talk) 09:04, July 16, 2012 (UTC)
      • Nice. Is there any way you could cut it down, though? The part about Logray coming to the rescue and fighting Morag strikes me in particular as something that could probably be turned into a single (short) sentence and still say everything that needs to be said.
      • Also --- how exactly did Teebo rely on himself to get out of trouble? It's a little unclear right now. Menkooroo (talk) 21:18, July 16, 2012 (UTC)
        • It now says "Logray came to the rescue of the young Ewoks and gained the upper hand over Morag, with the help of Teebo." Is that sufficient to answer your two aformentioned objections? I could expand on how Teebo helped Logray, but it would only make the paragraph longer. --LelalMekha (talk) 09:00, July 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • For both "Appearances" and "Notes and references," may I introduce to you... {{Ewoks}}! See here for an example of it in action. Menkooroo (talk) 05:40, July 16, 2012 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Rather minor, but is it "Shaman" or "shaman"? The article isn't very consistent about capitalization, so please rectify.
  • Similarly, is it "Ceremonial Wand" or "ceremonial wand"? Please check with source material and be consistent. CC7567 (talk) 04:27, July 18, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:12, July 19, 2012 (UTC)