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Lien-Tsai Qel-Droma

  • Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 Saturday, May 21, 2011, 11:27 UTC
  • Nomination comments: Takin' it back to the old-school.

(5 ACs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:11, May 21, 2011 (UTC)
  2. ACvote After a brief IRC review and assuming CC's satisfied with his objections. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 23:50, May 21, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Nice JangFett (Talk) 18:12, May 22, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 21:59, May 22, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 19:17, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:38, May 24, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Attack of the Clone
  • Just two really minor objections. Firstly, do you think it would be possible to refer to her as either "Lien-Tsai" or "Qel-Droma" through the entire article (with the latter being preferable because it's more formal)? I do understand that she should not be confused with her sons, but if you stick with referring to only her as Qel-Droma, there shouldn't be a problem in most places.
    • Addressed.
  • Secondly, is the fact that Jeth was her friend mentioned anywhere in the P&T? I'm not seeing it anywhere. Again, it's really minor, but it would be good for consistency.
    • Addressed.
  • That's all from me. Good work. CC7567 (talk) 21:49, May 21, 2011 (UTC)
  • Oh, also, is there a relevant image that can be added to the article? Maybe one of both Qel-Droma brothers? CC7567 (talk) 21:52, May 21, 2011 (UTC)
    • Addressed. Thanks for the review, CC. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy 9281 Saturday, May 21, 2011, 22:19 UTC
  • "Qel-Droma's family lived on their homeworld of Alderaan, where Qel-Droma—who had since become a powerful and respected Jedi": it sounds like there's a slight problem here, since there's no time change (only more context) between this sentence and the last sentence, and yet you say "had since become." Could you clarify this?
    • This too bothered me. Because we don't know the chronological specifics, I reworded so that it doesn't require time-based context. Addressed.
  • "Qel-Droma feared that in her son's utter dedication to the Jedi way, Ulic had missed its underlying message, a disposition that was quickly refuted with his recital of the Jedi Code." This is again a really minor objection, but I have a slight problem with the "recital" in terms of the overall chronology of this sentence. Up until you mention the Jedi Code, the sentence is mostly giving a general overview of Qel-Droma's feelings, but when you say Ulic's "recital" of the Code, it jumps to a specific occasion with no apparent lead-in, since a recital is a one-time deal. Would it be possible to lead into the "recital" part (or employ different word choice, possibly)? Let me know if I'm being unclear with this. CC7567 (talk) 07:08, May 22, 2011 (UTC)
    • Glad someone caught this. Addressed. Thanks for the review, CC. Please advise if anything further Is required.—Tommy 9281 Sunday, May 22, 2011, 09:14 UTC
Toprawa
  • Two things. First, please be consistent with the use of the WEG template for the TOTJ Companion in the Sources and referencing.
  • Second, I believe Star Wars: The Roleplaying Game is the correct referencing here, not Star Wars Roleplaying Game: "The mother of Ulic and Cay Qel-Droma was first mentioned in the Tales of the Jedi Companion, a sourcebook for the Star Wars Roleplaying Game"
  • Excellent overall. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:24, May 24, 2011 (UTC)
    • Addressed, and addressed. Thanks for the review, Tope. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy 9281 Tuesday, May 24, 2011, 20:24 UTC

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:38, May 24, 2011 (UTC)