Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Liberation of slave camps (second nomination)

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Liberation of slave camps

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:09, March 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Nom, role 2, dialogue 2...'cause why not have a Naboo-themed GA month? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:09, March 14, 2012 (UTC)

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:42, March 20, 2012 (UTC)
2. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:58, April 16, 2012 (UTC)
3. Abso... lutely! Menkooroo 18:46, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
4. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 18:41, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
5. Plagueis327 18:43, May 19, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge

• No "Aftermath" section?
  • I had removed it because it was a repetition of the last sentence. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:44, March 14, 2012 (UTC)
• As dawn broke: You never mentioned a day-time before.
  • It's in the first "infiltration" paragraph--it's a night mission. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:44, March 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • Facepalm. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:31, March 15, 2012 (UTC)
• All for now. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 21:25, March 14, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:44, March 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Kael had been shot down and was missing. Believing that the captain was okay, Sykes raced off to join the search for Kael: He raced of to find him if he was okay? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:31, March 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • How's that? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 14:14, March 19, 2012 (UTC)
    • I'm still unsure about that sentence: While Sykes believed that the captain was okay, he raced off to join the search for Kael.: Do you mean that he presumed that Kael was okay, but just raced off to make sure he was? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:39, March 20, 2012 (UTC)
      • Yes. Kael was missing, so they went to find him. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 13:17, March 20, 2012 (UTC)
        • I'll strike this, but please find a way to make that clearer. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:42, March 20, 2012 (UTC)

Nabooooooo

• The intro says that Sykes disrupted and attacked the Trade Fed base, but "Prelude" says that it was the Naboo resistance led by Kael. Can these two statements be reconciled?
  • That doesn't make the sentence too clunky, does it? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:19, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
• Would any of the quotes from Disruption of Comm 4 or Attack on disabled base work for "Prelude?" The one about putting the base to sleep seems like a great candidate.
  • Absolutely; added the one about Sykes being drafted into the TF. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:19, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
• Is the Anti-aircraft weaponry worth a mention in the Trade Fed's "strength" infobox field? Or is that just another name for the laser turrets?
  • Same model of turrets. You convinced me to differentiate them with an article. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:19, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
• Should Naboo Resistance be listed in the infobox's "Combatants" field?
  • Well, I'm not sure if their Resistance affiliation trumps there Security Force one. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:19, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
• Does Sykes destroy the gunboats launched from the camp's hangar? It's mentioned that they launch, but then it only says that Sykes destroys the turrets.
  • You don't have to destroy them to finish the mission, just the turrets. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:19, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
• No Aftermath section? Menkooroo 05:14, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • Everyone asked me why I deleted it, so I put one in. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:19, May 18, 2012 (UTC)

Jujiggum

• "He had to destroy more mines on the way to the central concourse, though he had no difficulties in passing through the gates of the central area until he sneaked up to the anti-air defenses. The defensive posts were alerted to his presence when Sykes opened fire on them." A few things here: The central concourse of what? Is the "central area" you then mention the same as the central concourse? Also, it sounds like Sykes stopped caring whether or not he was hidden when he opened fire on the defensive posts; it's a bit obvious to say that they were alerted to his presence when he fired on them.
  • Concourse question resolved. As for your second point, sure its redundant but Sykes himself points out that he'd been discovered. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 00:44, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
• You say in the infobox that "Droid bombers" were present; but the article body suggests that we only know of one.
  • Adjusted. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 00:44, May 19, 2012 (UTC)
• That's all from me. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 20:54, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 00:44, May 19, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:36, May 19, 2012 (UTC)

1. WP:VG. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:09, March 14, 2012 (UTC)
2. I'm of course very happy to see a nom for WP:VG, and FWIW, it's currently over 1,000 words, so it could be a FAN if you so choose. Just thought I'd give you the heads up. :) —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:13, March 15, 2012 (UTC)
   • Eh, I think I'd rather go through the GAN process first. Anyway, chances are those 38 words will disappear, heh. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 02:19, March 15, 2012 (UTC)