Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Liagri

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Liagri

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:57, November 20, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My very slow progress through Alderaan NPCs continues.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 23:35, December 29, 2013 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 13:30, January 4, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Winterz (talk) 00:40, January 23, 2014 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:50, January 31, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:56, February 5, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • but Liagri had to inform him due to the fact no Republic troops were available to help immediately. - I think you may be missing a few words here.
  • Establish species and sex in biography. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:51, December 17, 2013 (UTC)
Winterz
  • You should explain the alternative outcome in the Bts. Winterz (talk) 01:56, December 24, 2013 (UTC)
  • If it's not too bothersome, a little context on the Alderaan Civil War (you don't even need to mention which houses, just the purpose) ;)
  • Within the {{Gamemechanics}} part of the body, you seem to refer to the unknown individual as "they" in several instants, fix that. Also in that part, didn't the individual fire the flare gun? Mention that.
  • Just noting something, a sergeant is a NCO (Non-comissioned officer) and that means that it is not exactly an officer, more like a pre-officer, so please correct with respective category. Winterz (talk) 22:27, January 13, 2014 (UTC)
    • Changed to personnel is that ok? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:49, January 18, 2014 (UTC)
501st
  • His skin doesn't really look green in the picture... Is it really green? 501st dogma(talk) 22:50, January 3, 2014 (UTC)
    • I thought it was but I can change it to yellow or something if you disagree :P Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:57, January 4, 2014 (UTC)
      • I was thinking it was brown, but if you think it is green, and no one else disagrees, we can leave it as it. 501st dogma(talk) 13:26, January 4, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Please reload the infobox. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:47, January 12, 2014 (UTC)
  • I have to object to the article's assertion of his skin color being green. This dude is not green. Yoda is green. There might be some subtle green shadowing there, at best. I don't know what you want to call this exactly. Light brownish with green? But you should come up with something else here.
    • Changed to light brown. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:13, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • The same objection about the use of "they" and "their" as pronouns for individuals of unidentified gender that I left on your other nomination. I'm going to leave this same objection every time I see this, so you might as well go through all of your articles and fix this: "A Republic-aligned individual then approached Liagri and offered to repair the sensors, which they successfully did."
  • Likewise, please revise the game-mechanics section.
  • May I ask why you use the endash and a space in the Bio quote and not an emdash? Is that the way the game presents it?
    • Changed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:13, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
      • I'm not sure what I was seeing here, but apparently you had emdash originally, which I think is better. I changed this back. My bad. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 09:57, January 31, 2014 (UTC)
  • The Bio paragraph prior to the game-mechanics section would really benefit from a paragraph break someplace.
  • Two reviewing notes: As I noted on another of your nominations, please avoid contractions in formal writing. Secondly, please avoid use of the word "whilst," which is chiefly a British term. Wookieepedia uses American-English by policy. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:21, January 23, 2014 (UTC)
    • I genuinely had no idea whilst was only a British term I'll avoid its use in future articles. Apologise again for the contradictions. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:13, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
El Jefe
  • I would really like to see you put a year in the intro. Probably where you talk about Brant Organa contacting him.
  • Seeing an inconsistency: in the intro you say the arrays belonged to the House of Thul, but in the body you say that they were the ones sabotaging them, and no mention of their ownership is given. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 05:00, February 4, 2014 (UTC)
    • That's weird when I nominated it the intro said damaged by troops belonging to House Thul but since then someone's removed the troops bit. Re-added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:20, February 4, 2014 (UTC)

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