Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Lauli Wahlo

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Lauli Wahlo

Nominated by: Jawaman ^{Speak softly, and drive a big tank.} 10:55, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Just a cool looking Quarren with a cybernetic eye.

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Support

Object

First glance
- Write the bio from Wahlo's POV please; the first sentence doesn't even acknowledge his existence.
  - Fixed
    - This remains; you're still missing vital information about Wahlo in the bio that you mention elsewhere in the article. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(We seed the stars)} 13:26, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
- You have information in the intro that isn't in the bio.
  - Fixed
    - This remains, and is in a way connected to the one above; you don't give hardly any info about Wahlo. (i.e. you don't even mention that he was a male Quarren.) Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(We seed the stars)} 13:26, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
- ~~In the intro you say Wahlo told Tano where to find Bannamu, but in the bio you say Wahlo and Dez told Tano where to find him. Which is correct?~~
  - It was Dez. Fixed
- I'll give it a full review once these are taken care of. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(We seed the stars)} 12:59, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
Cav:
- ~~Intro - you mention that Tano and Sinube were looking for Tano's lightsaber ... why? Some context is needed.~~
  - Fixed.
- Intro - Wahlo answered them that he knew where to buy one, but once the Togruta revealed herself to be a Jedi, explained that her weapon had been pilfered by Bannamu, who could be found at the Spider Arms Hostel. This sentence is disjointed and fragmentary; consider revising and breaking up.
- Context on the pickpocket - what was their name?
  - What was their name.(??) What do you mean with that?
- Why was the Weequay arms dealer being arrested?
  - Is that relevant to the article?
    - I wouldn't have asked for the information if I didn't think it was relevant. Context is important. Do not assume that the reader knows these facts, or has even read/seen the source material. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 20:24, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
- Why did Tano and Sinube go to Wahlo to learn the location of her lightsaber?
- P&T - why did Wahlo make an exception to "betraying" his friend when Tano revealed herself to be a Jedi?
  - Fixed.
- The article has several grammatical errors and underlinking throughout; please fix these. Articles should be linked to on first mention, and you are missing several obvious ones such as lightsaber. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 23:15, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
  - Underlinking fixed. Please tell me where I can find the grammar errors or give me a hint.
~~Airdate for "Lightsaber Lost"?~~ -- 1358 ^(Talk) 05:01, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
- Fixed.
"James Arnold Taylor was voiced Wahlo (Wahlo was credited as Bounty Hunter #1), who..." Check the beginning. It's wrong. Also, do not use brackets in the prose; replace it with something like "...voiced Wahlo, who was credited as...". -- 1358 ^(Talk) 19:23, April 10, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

Unaddressed objections dating back to April 4, and nomination is therefore considered inactive under the new two-week policy. CC7567 ^(talk) 05:35, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
Grunny (talk) 05:39, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
As I told CC and Grunny, I would have been willing to extend a "grandfather clause" type thing for this nomination in regards to the new two-week idle rule, but the nominator went on Wookieevacation 10 days ago and has not been heard from since. So, you snooze, you lose. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:43, April 19, 2010 (UTC)