Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Langoonan

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Langoonan

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:21, April 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Second species nom for the barn burner!

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. - Princess GLG 12:08, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  2. They must be blue. Blue Langoon, get it? ~SavageBOB sig 13:10, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  3. --Eyrezer (talk) 10:34, May 1, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:33, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:12, May 16, 2013 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Well done. Interesting read. :) MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 22:45, May 23, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Princess
  • Why the NOTOC?
    • Ah a relic of when I thought the article was going to be only a CAnom. Removed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:18, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • It only says that they are sentient in the intro and infobox. This information needs to be added somewhere in the main body of the article.
  • There were a few minor things I corrected here.
  • Just to be sure, there aren't any quotes available? - Princess GLG 12:07, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • There are some referring specifically to the Death masks, Jiliac says "A death mask from Langoona!" but no quote specfically refers to the species. This reminds me though I should add the quote to the mask article so thanks. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:18, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
Savaged…
  • Technically, you can't have the other sections of the article without a "Biology and appearance" section. Since we don't know anything about what they look like, it's best to just have a one-line section that says, "The Langoonans were a sentient species" or the equivalent. It's silly, I know, but our Manual of Style requires it.
    • Added although I'm not sure if the mask line is relevant but one line seemed odd. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:37, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
      • That works, but you should take the "sentient species" bit out of "Society & culture" now. ~SavageBOB sig 13:32, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'd add the quote about the death mask as the lead quote. It's about their culture, so it's pertinent. You can probably even add another quote about the death masks to the "Society and culture" section, since that exchange between the Hutts goes on for a few lines. More later! ~SavageBOB sig 13:42, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • Ok added the quote with a bit more explanation then on the mask page. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:37, April 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Be sure only to use "pp." in references if you're giving a page range (e.g., pp. 3–5). If it's a single page, just use "p."
  • Their rebellion should probably get its own article.
  • Can you go into a bit more detail on the death masks thing? Like, just something small like mentioning which Hutt thought the death mask was valued art, and which didn't (from the story in Rebel Dawn). ~SavageBOB sig 13:43, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
    • I'll mention that Durga considered them art but I don't think you can assume Jiliac doesn't think them art. I interpreted it as her becoming angry at receiving it due to the fact Durga was using it as a message to allude to his plans to kill her. Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:02, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
  • OK, last little thing: I see you have them first mentioned in Rebel Dawn, but only first identified in The Essential Atlas. Should the Rebel Dawn mention get the {{Imo}} template? ~SavageBOB sig 13:06, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
Eyrezer=
  • Please add the full name of Jaliac in the quote, and please also add a note that a Langoonan mask was given to him whenever.
    • Added the name to the quote and the info to the body of the article. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:49, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Is there a suitable picture of a Hutt to add some colour to the article? --Eyrezer (talk) 08:31, April 30, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:45, May 23, 2013 (UTC)