Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Lamos Chatoor

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Lamos Chatoor

• Nominated by: —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 00:53, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:"The choices of one shape the futures of all."

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Hä? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:10, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
2. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 03:56, February 27, 2012 (UTC)
3. —NAYAYEN 17:37, February 27, 2012 (UTC)
4. --Eyrezer 02:10, March 3, 2012 (UTC)
5. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 12:00, March 7, 2012 (UTC)
6. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:50, March 10, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Exiled Jedi

• I think that the introduction is a little bit too short. Adding one more sentence should do the trick.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 21:29, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 03:45, February 27, 2012 (UTC)

Nayayen

• "Jade quickly silenced him by passing through his neck with her lightsaber" This needs rewording as it makes it sound like she physically passed through his neck, not that only her lightsaber did. —NAYAYEN 14:48, February 27, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 17:34, February 27, 2012 (UTC)
    • It still sounds a bit stiff to me, but that's simply personal preference. Nice job otherwise, —NAYAYEN 17:37, February 27, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

• In the year 0 ABY, Emperor's Hand Mara Jade found Chatoor - this implies that Chatoor was hiding, rather than in his usual place of business/residence which is implied by the quote in the PT section. Can you clarify a little? - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 22:10, March 2, 2012 (UTC)
  • See what you think.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:56, March 3, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:50, March 10, 2012 (UTC)