Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Korsin (senior)

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Korsin (senior)

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 04:14, January 13, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: FloydProject: Lost Tribe. Let's get Papa Korsin in on the action, shall we?

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. I never thought that it would end like this if I asked for his article. :P Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:30, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
  2. —Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 17:43, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:12, January 24, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 17:34, January 29, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Tweaked "another planet" because no other planet had been mentioned yet. Great work! Menkooroo 05:27, February 2, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Return of the Jedi
  • Just one that I see: "Korsin was a highly respected spacer, never losing a ship during his lengthy career—he had two sons, Yaru and Devore." - This sentence just bothers me. The fact that he had two sons doesn't seem to have anything to do with him being a good spacer. Perhaps breaking this up into two sentences would be good.
    • Fixed.
  • Nice article.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 22:50, January 13, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Before I dive in, might I suggest moving the article to "Korsin (senior)"? It seems unnecessary to capitalize "Senior" here. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:45, January 19, 2012 (UTC)
  • In the intro, I'm somewhat confused by this statement. Is this intending to say he commanded the Omen with his father as a subordinate officer aboard? Might we clarify this any? "Eventually, Yaru gained command of a Sith dreadnaught named the Omen over Admiral Korsin"
    • I mean to say that they were both vying for command of the vessel, and that Yaru won it instead of his father. Tried to clear it up a bit.
  • I think we should at least leave a redlink for this second woman: "born to a woman on another planet" Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:47, January 23, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:59, February 3, 2012 (UTC)