Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Knire Dark

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Knire Dark

  • Nominated by: Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:56, September 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Wasn't sure about how to work that first quote as Dax refers to everyone as a male due to how his soundbytes were programmed.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Demos Traxen (talk) 19:06, December 20, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Supreme Emperor (talk) 15:53, December 21, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ~SavageBOB sig 15:46, December 29, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 09:47, January 1, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 22:52, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Winterz (talk) 00:46, January 12, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Winterz
  • Alright, first of all, delete the gaps in the infobox section.
    • If you meant the gaps in between the words and the sources, then it's done.
  • I've also provided a brief copy-edit so please, check it out to notice some of your other minor mistakes.
    • Oi, those were fairly clumsy of me. Thanks
  • As for the first quote, I'm not entirely sure, but it would be best if you put it how it is written in the source and then add a [sic] tag to the mistake.
    • Not sure if I put it in right, but there it is.
  • Professions in this situation, don't count as affiliations. Get rid of them, sir ;) Winterz (talk) 12:10, September 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • "Contraband" by itself already means illegal, so you'll have to fix these "illegal contraband" assessments that you've made there.
    • That is correct. Thanks for that.
  • The "Notes and references" section should be below all others here and not between the App and Sources sections.
    • Whoops, I didn't notice that.
  • The Bts needs a couple more references.
    • How does that look? Also added in the voice cred. Also should Andre Kirk be given an article? Or can it be left as a redlink for the moment (And be given an article later if it's not pressing now)?
  • I have noticed that you may have not yet read the Manual of Style and Layout Guides and you should really do this before nominating anything here, sir. For links and more regulations, read the GAN page's procedures on top. Do this and then I'll continue. Winterz (talk) 17:52, September 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • I thought I had read them. I'll continue to look over them though to make sure I do not continue to forget things that should not be forgotten. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:45, October 1, 2013 (UTC)
  • The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia needs to receive the respectibe template form in the Sources section and remember to hide the page (assuming you know how to do this). Winterz (talk) 16:02, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
    • Oh, so that template apples to both Sources and Notes&refs? Okay, I'll get on that then. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 16:04, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
      • Also, is that how it's done for the source? —Unsigned comment by Clonehunter (talk • contribs)
        • I went ahead and I did it myself. Check the edit to see how I did it (especially the "hiding code" for the page marks). Winterz (talk) 02:20, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
          • Aah, alright. In that case, I should add these to any other nominated articles then. Ok
  • Reload the infobox. Winterz (talk) 02:20, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
Savaged…
  • "from the Outer Rim planet of the same name..." This is confusing, as I'm not sure if you mean the planet is called Sybonna, smuggler, Outer Rim, or something else. You might need to break up the first sentence, as it's cramming a lot of info in.
    • How does it read now?
  • As with the article on Sang, do a sweep for linking, pipe linking properly, and extra spaces. More when this is done! ~SavageBOB sig 17:44, October 14, 2013 (UTC)
    • Sir, this objection has remained without reply for a considerable amount of time now. You should really get into this asap. The limit is 2 weeks and this one has stayed for almost 2 months. ;) Winterz (talk) 01:31, December 4, 2013 (UTC)
      • I believe I've done all I've can for this already. I'm really just waiting on Andre Kirk's reply for what's been mentioned below. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:17, December 10, 2013 (UTC)
  • Sorry to be so negligent on this. End of semester woes! Now: Mon Calamari, Ryloth, and Gamorr need context upon first mention in the body. Then we're golden! ~SavageBOB sig 13:44, December 20, 2013 (UTC)
    • How does that look? ANd s'fine. We all got other things to attend too of course! --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:25, December 28, 2013 (UTC)
Daytime Nighttime Suffering
  • "Knire Dark bears a notable resemblance to the Ancient Egyptian god Anubis.[3] The name of her species, Syboona, when spelled backwards phonetically sounds like the word Anubis." - This is OR... but it can be rephrased to be more acceptable. I think. Anyone else's opinion here would be welcome. Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 04:46, October 22, 2013 (UTC)
    • I could try asking Andre Kirk, the lead art designer, on his art blog. A lot of the BtS RR character info seems to have to do with creativity, though most seem to be simple observations. I don't know if he'd know, but maybe. He did recently relese some Racer Revenge concept art on his blog, so maybe there's something fresh in his mind when it came to these character's creation. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 15:10, November 4, 2013 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • "Dark was generally on edge when visiting any world that hosted Republic authorities, and her nervousness was clear on the track: she generally avoided conflict with the other racers": please vary "generally."
    • How does some of that look?
  • Significant excess usage of "achieved"/"achieving" in the second paragraph of the Bio. There are also a lot of similar sentence structures that make the paragraph rather cookie-cutter. Please do some rewording.
    • Tried to vary and reword it all a bit.
      • As a note, to my knowledge, it's not necessary to italicize time quantities in narrative text, so I've removed the italics. CC7567 (talk) 00:57, January 1, 2014 (UTC)
  • Please note that most citation templates, such as {{Hnn}} in ref 4, do not need further italics. Also, something seems to be wrong with the formatting of that ref.
    • Whoops, removed the extra italics. But I'm not sure if I'm seeing what's wrong wth the formatting?
  • The detail about her gaining Podracing skill, even though Podracing was originally just a front to her, would be relevant to mention in the P&T.
  • "as one twenty-three playable characters": please check this.
  • I'll take another look once the above objections are addressed. CC7567 (talk) 09:01, December 28, 2013 (UTC)
  • "when Republic authorities raided one of her contraband storehouses": this makes it sound as though she was confirmed to have more than one storehouse, but is that true? The same holds for the reference to "one of the Syboona's storehouses" in the body. CC7567 (talk) 00:57, January 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • I felt it may be best to keep this sorta, mm, vague maybe on whether she could have more than one or not. I think what I've changed it too now should leave able to be read as meaning she has only one or she has more than one. A sort of Neutral stance as we don't know. Does that work, or should I explicitly label it as one storehouse? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 08:39, January 1, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:46, January 12, 2014 (UTC)


  • Also, I was wondering if/how I should note in how those lap times should be labeled. Just leave them as ##:##.## or ##:##.## seconds/minutes/other? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:44, September 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Clonehunter, I just wanted to say that you should try to answer the pending objections as best as you can as you've waited long enough for the author's reply, which, realistically speaking, may never happen.Winterz (talk) 19:23, December 19, 2013 (UTC)
    • Well I have actually removed most of that BtS section as of a week ago or so. I did get a message from Andre Kirk a few days before thanksgiving, and he mentioned that he if he can't find the time he may instead direct to me to the guy who directed the project. Chances are slim, so who knows. I moved all of that info into the talk page, however, just in case something comes in the future or I send another email. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 00:38, December 20, 2013 (UTC)
Vote to strike Fourdot's objection
  1. ACvote User has been inactive for over a month now, and the objection appears addressed. CC7567 (talk) 08:43, December 28, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Winterz (talk) 13:40, December 28, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:20, December 31, 2013 (UTC)