Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Khorm

The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Khorm

• Nominated by: Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 15:36, August 11, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: My second CAnom turned GAnom :P

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Jujiggum

• Before I give this a review, the intro needs a huge expansion. Again: the intro should fully summarize the main points of the body. A single sentence is not nearly enough. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:42, August 11, 2010 (UTC)
  • Expanded--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 19:11, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
• Underlinking, and as Xd mentioned below, links to redirects.
• Are there no further quotes you can use?
  • There probably are, but I don't have the comic at the moment (and probably won't for a few weeks), but if you or anyone you know has a quote that is apropriate, please feel free to either tell me or add it yourself.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 21:01, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
    • If I may butt in: You should not wait for others to add quotes, but ask users who have the comic for help. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 18:39, August 13, 2010 (UTC)
      • I see.
        • Just to make sure you are aware, this and the above linking objection remain, and it has almost been two weeks since they were made. Please fix them, or else the nom will fall under the inactivity rule and will have to be removed. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 19:52, August 25, 2010 (UTC)
          • Yes. I apologize for not doing anything as I have not been able to do any editing lately but I have returned now and I will be on it ASAP.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 02:46, September 1, 2010 (UTC)
            • On the subject, I have re-acquired the comic and have looked through it for Khorm quotes, but I did not find any about the planet itself, only about the storm (which is not a natural occurence on Khorm) so my answer to Jonjedi up there (at least for now) is no.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 22:37, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
              • Okay, what about one during the battle? If there's not one applicable, then the article's only current quote should probably be moved up to the main quote, since it at least indicates the planet's terrain. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 23:28, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
                • I'll put it up there for now and I'll replace it if I find another quote.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 16:28, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
                  • Okay, I've stricken this for now, then. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 18:27, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
• Italics are missing in the BTS.
  • Added--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 21:01, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
  • There's still one missing. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 19:15, August 13, 2010 (UTC)
    • Oops. Added the other.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 19:30, August 13, 2010 (UTC)
• More to come. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk)

Xd1358

• The article needs a Behind the scenes section. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 16:20, August 11, 2010 (UTC)
  • Added--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 19:11, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
    • Fix the capitalization. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 19:19, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
  • Did you mean to de-capitalize the word "scenes"? If so, done.
• Use {{Ref|}} in the infobox.
  • Used.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 23:10, August 13, 2010 (UTC)
• Source 22 BBY.
  • In addition, you should use "around" instead of "in", as the timeline has not yet been established. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 20:23, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
    • Both are done.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 21:01, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
      • Are you sure that In Service to the Republic provides the date? TCW articles tend to use the novelization as the source for the date.
        • I'm pretty sure part 1 does.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 22:59, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
• Please copy-edit the article yourself and fix spelling errors.
• There are several links to redirects.
  • I've fixed some of them, but I'll still be on the lookout for any others.
    • There are still several links to redirects. An easy way to find them is for example to copy User:Xd1358/monobook.css to User:Bonslywizard/monobook.css (or User:Bonslywizard/monaco.css, if you use Monaco as skin). -- 1358 ^(Talk) 05:14, August 14, 2010 (UTC)
• More to come. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 19:19, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
• Nothing should be only in the infobox.
  • What do you mean by that?
    • You have several facts (including its location) only in the infobox. The description should also mention those things.
      • This better?
        • No. "Region" and "Atmosphere" facts are still not there. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 05:14, August 14, 2010 (UTC)
          • This better?--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 22:59, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
• Any reason for the punctuation in the infobox?
  • I didn't notice that until you mentioned it, but done--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 21:01, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
• Remove one of the images in the "History" section.
  • Removed the "trench" image.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 21:01, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
• -- 1358 ^(Talk) 20:23, August 12, 2010 (UTC)
• Please italicize the references as well. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 18:34, August 25, 2010 (UTC)
  • I've italiziced the references.--Bonslywizard^{(Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal!)} 22:59, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
    • This remains. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 06:18, September 5, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

1. Objection over three weeks old. Pointed it out above when it neared two weeks, user acknowledged, and so I gave it a little extra time, but still nothing has been done to fix it. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 13:29, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
2. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 13:30, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
3. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 13:47, September 5, 2010 (UTC)