- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Kharl
- Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 05:35, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I do kinda wonder if his name was inspired by the Legends Kharl. But I guess we'll never know.
- Date Archived: 21:19, 20 November 2024 (UTC)
- Final word count: 785 words (182 introduction, 589 body, 14 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 781 words (181 introduction, 586 body, 14 behind the scenes)
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Support
Lewisr (talk) 03:39, 13 September 2024 (UTC)- Wok142 (talk) 04:06, 5 October 2024 (UTC)
- Zed42
(talk) 10:15, 8 November 2024 (UTC) - Assuming ecks' objections were addressed and will be struck. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 15:06, 10 November 2024 (UTC)
- Xd1358 (Talk) 19:53, 20 November 2024 (UTC)
Object
Ecks
The intro, and the body to a lesser extent, start off really repetitive. As I understand it, Naboo (the people) are a group of humans from Naboo. The intro essentially says "Kharl was a human from Naboo, a human male from the planet Naboo".- While they are humans from Naboo (more of a cultural group/subspecies to be honest), not every human resident from the world is classified as in the Naboo people category; these categories were split awhile back as they became distinct. I'm personally of the opinion that as much of the infobox should be present in the intro so as not to be exclusive to the body and infobox alone, hence why they're there, similar to other SAs. I understand that it may read repetitive, but that same sentence structure is also used for many other cultural groups in intros and it's more of a coincidence they share the same name in this case.—spookywillowwtalk 23:28, 9 November 2024 (UTC)
- I understand the logic and I think the wording works okay-ish in the biography because there's some separation between the repetitive information/wording. However, in the intro, for the sake of the reader, I think you could just remove the "Naboo (the people" altogether and still convey the same information. Xd1358 (Talk) 17:57, 20 November 2024 (UTC)
- Moved to later in the intro; I'm still strongly opposed to infobox-exclusivity in the intro, and there's enough precedent with recent status articles to support that it needs to be there in some form.—spookywillowwtalk 19:49, 20 November 2024 (UTC)
- I understand the logic and I think the wording works okay-ish in the biography because there's some separation between the repetitive information/wording. However, in the intro, for the sake of the reader, I think you could just remove the "Naboo (the people" altogether and still convey the same information. Xd1358 (Talk) 17:57, 20 November 2024 (UTC)
- While they are humans from Naboo (more of a cultural group/subspecies to be honest), not every human resident from the world is classified as in the Naboo people category; these categories were split awhile back as they became distinct. I'm personally of the opinion that as much of the infobox should be present in the intro so as not to be exclusive to the body and infobox alone, hence why they're there, similar to other SAs. I understand that it may read repetitive, but that same sentence structure is also used for many other cultural groups in intros and it's more of a coincidence they share the same name in this case.—spookywillowwtalk 23:28, 9 November 2024 (UTC)
In the intro, the painkiller is referred to as "medicinal grade spice" (sans hyphen) and in the body, as "medical-grade spice". Generally, I would prefer the second variant. What does the source use?- It's medicinal-grade in QH; swapped.—spookywillowwtalk 23:28, 9 November 2024 (UTC)
In the intro, you say he uses crutches but the Equipment section indicates he used two canes. These are not the same thing, which one is correct?- Swapped.—spookywillowwtalk 23:28, 9 November 2024 (UTC)
- Review note: be careful with using too many emdashes, they break up the flow. Many of the instances can be replaced with simple commas, which I've done in my copy-edit. Xd1358 (Talk) 13:36, 9 November 2024 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:19, 20 November 2024 (UTC)