Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Khar Shian

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Khar Shian

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 04:23, December 16, 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: My first ever moon nom. A milestone!

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 09:36, December 19, 2009 (UTC)
2. Nayayen...TALK 09:00, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
3. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 13:11, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
4. —Tommy 9281 ^{(Mechno-chair)} 15:44, February 23, 2010 (UTC)
5. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:09, February 28, 2010 (UTC)

Object

1. Just one thing in the intro: "This maneuver, coupled with some other trickery by Sadow, resulted in..." sounds rather unencyclopedic, can you reword this? Nayayen...TALK 19:47, December 21, 2009 (UTC)
   • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 01:20, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
2. Attack of the CLone
   • Can Sadow's fortress/palace/whatever you want to call it get an article?
     • Addressed.
   • Can we get some sort of time marker at the very beginning of the History?
     • Added.
   • Can the quotes be related better to Khar Shian itself?
     • There really aren't any quotes directly pertaining to the moon itself. I tried to add quotes as pertinent as possible.
       • I meant in the captions. Sorry for not specifying. CC7567 ^(talk) 04:23, February 18, 2010 (UTC)
         • Addressed.
   • I'm assuming that you've checked the NEC and all other sources, including the CSWE? CC7567 ^(talk) 21:23, February 14, 2010 (UTC)
     • Yup. There's no CSWE entry or any other mentions.
   • "In 5,000 BBY, Naga Sadow used Khar Shian as a staging point for an attack on the planet Ziost that was intended to free hyperspace explorers Gav and Jori Daragon, who had recently stumbled upon the Empire while fleeing creditors on Koros Major. The attack, which was meant to appear as a Galactic Republic assault, was a success." I'm sure that there's a relevant link to the assault that you can insert somewhere in here. CC7567 ^(talk) 04:23, February 18, 2010 (UTC)
     • Article created and linked.

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:09, February 28, 2010 (UTC)

• Oh, one question. "...that fortress was a mere decoy, with Sadow's actual base and defenses on the far side of Khar Delba." Is that supposed to say Khar Shian? Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 19:48, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
  • Ah, yes. My mistake. Fixed. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:09, February 9, 2010 (UTC)