Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Katiz Xemir

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Katiz Xemir

Nominated by: 501st dogma^(talk) 23:34, February 21, 2013 (UTC)
Nomination comments: He's angry... like Hulk... but maybe on a much lower scale....

—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:46, February 22, 2013 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:47, February 23, 2013 (UTC)
IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:42, February 25, 2013 (UTC)
Very nice Dogma.--Talrrivanian ^{(Headquarters)} 17:04, February 28, 2013 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:27, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
MasterFred^(Whatever) 21:30, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
Winterz (talk) 21:35, March 1, 2013 (UTC)

Could you fix this? In 0 ABY, he was on the space station known as StarForge Nebula, located in the StarForge Nebula…—Unsigned comment by Jedi Kasra (talk • contribs)
- Damn; fixed. This is Kasra's objection I presume? 501st dogma^(talk) 00:47, February 22, 2013 (UTC)
  - Yes it is. Sorry about that, and good job.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:46, February 22, 2013 (UTC)

~~"killed his family. Left without a family," Double family. Try to avoid this type of repetition.~~ IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:39, February 24, 2013 (UTC)
- Done. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma^(talk) 12:42, February 24, 2013 (UTC)

The last sentence of the P&T has "blaster pistols" listed twice. I am aware that one is heavy and the other two are not, but it reads awkwardly without something to specify that the "blaster pistols" are lower grade. Perhaps insert an adjective? This is more a suggestion than an objection. Article checked out clean Good work. MasterFred^(Whatever) 15:39, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
- Is that any better? 501st dogma^(talk) 23:36, February 26, 2013 (UTC)

I know this is a bit picky (and apologies for that :p), but could you reword this "hiring himself out as a mercenary against Imperial targets" as it's exactly alike with the one on the intro (you choose where to change, biography or intro).
- That should satsify it.
~~Isn't it more specific to which position did he applied to, as a Far Orbit crewmember?~~ Winterz (talk) 17:41, February 28, 2013 (UTC)
- No more specific. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma^(talk) 01:03, March 1, 2013 (UTC)

~~If I'm looking at his picture right, it appears the character as a toothpick in his mouth. Considering we have an article on toothpicks, this should be mentioned in the article.~~ Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:45, February 28, 2013 (UTC)
- There tis been added. 501st dogma^(talk) 01:03, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
  - Please remove the space between this sentence and the accompanying ref note. This is certainly a sofixit objection, but I bring this to your attention because this is something you should be paying closer attention to. You've written and reviewed enough status articles by now not to be committing these types of errors anymore. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:44, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
    - Sorry, It's been fixed.
I also find the new wording in this recent change very misleading. This seems to suggest he hired himself out as a mercenary to the employ of Imperials rather than against them. I realize you made this change per Winterz's objection, but the original wording was much better. Try to find a happy medium to satisfy both objections: "becoming a mercenary who only dealt with Imperial targets." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:44, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
- Is that any better? 501st dogma^(talk) 21:19, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
  - Yes. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:27, March 1, 2013 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:37, March 1, 2013 (UTC)