Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Jorran

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Jorran

• Nominated by: OLIOSTER ^(talk) 23:20, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Something witty.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:01, March 29, 2012 (UTC)
2. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 23:19, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
3. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:22, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
4. This was probably one of my favorite missions in KOTOR II.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 11:28, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
5. Looks good, per Cal.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 12:54, May 12, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge

• As a salvager, Jorran was part of a group of salvagers that worked out of a camp near the ruins of the Jedi Enclave on Dantooine. During this time, he was part of one of the salvager : Can you find a synonym for at least one of the salvages.
• A little bit more context for the Battle of Khonda?
• A mention of his gratitude and that he stealt things in the P&T.
• Context for laigreks?
  • Hopefully all addressed, thanks. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 15:21, March 28, 2012 (UTC)
    • Please take a look at the remaining objections. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:42, March 29, 2012 (UTC)
      • Hopefully better. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 13:58, March 29, 2012 (UTC)
• Good job. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:41, March 28, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

• Doesn't this article require the templates that state that the article assumes 100% light side completion/choices made by the player during the game? - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:26, April 25, 2012 (UTC)
  • Added. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 16:21, May 3, 2012 (UTC)

Floyd

• Intro seems a little too big compared to the rest of the body.
  • Any suggestions on what to remove? OLIOSTER ^(talk) 16:46, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
    • Not saying outright remove anything, just try to condense it some.
      • Tried, hopefully is better. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 14:45, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
• At one point in the bio you say he stole a moisture vaporator, and at another point you say he stole a vaporator modulator. Which is it?
  • Fixed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 16:46, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
• The description of the interaction between Jorran and Surik is kind of choppy.
  • Suggestions? OLIOSTER ^(talk) 16:46, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
    • Just try to even out the flow of the text. There's too many short, choppy sentences.
      • Hopefully better now. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 14:45, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
• I'm sure quotes are available for Bio and P&T.
  • Added. Man, KOTOR2 sucks on Windows 7! :P
• Context for Khoonda in the bio.
  • Added. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 16:46, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
• Are the double refs really needed in the P&T?
  • Nope. Removed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 16:46, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
• Good work. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:13, May 10, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:15, May 12, 2012 (UTC)

• Thanks to Jang for pre-nom review and copyedit. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 23:20, March 27, 2012 (UTC)