- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Jollin Resbin
- Nominated by: Kilson 00:41, March 1, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:It has been....awhile since I was last here, so I apologize now if I'm a bit rusty.
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
A little rough around the edges perhaps, but overall good work. Good to see you back, PIEman. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 22:44, March 4, 2011 (UTC)- 1358 (Talk) 23:52, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:09, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
- Woopsie forgot to support. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 03:03, March 7, 2011 (UTC)
- It's cool. At least you did. Kilson 03:11, March 7, 2011 (UTC)
- Menkooroo 03:10, March 7, 2011 (UTC)
Object
At a glance
We generally don't put planets in the affiliation field, unless specifically speaking of a planetary government. I'll come back to this to give a full review. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 05:42, March 1, 2011 (UTC)- Just to clarify, I would have {{sofixit}}'d this for you, but I just wanted to know if there was a specific reason as to why you added it. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 05:47, March 1, 2011 (UTC)
- I added it mainly because Resbin is a member of the Senate and represents Sneeve in the Senate. In a way, he is specifically affiliated to the planetary government. Kilson 20:32, March 1, 2011 (UTC)
- In that case, I would either make an article specifically for the Sneeve government, or change that affiliation to the Galactic Senate instead. As it stands now you have him affiliated with a physical entity, not an organizational one. Nitpicky? Yes, but necessary for the sake of accuracy. Welcome back, by the way. :) Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:57, March 1, 2011 (UTC)
- I see what you mean, I fixed it now. And thanks, especially for Jaccoba. Kilson 00:25, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
- No problemo. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 00:54, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
- I see what you mean, I fixed it now. And thanks, especially for Jaccoba. Kilson 00:25, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
- In that case, I would either make an article specifically for the Sneeve government, or change that affiliation to the Galactic Senate instead. As it stands now you have him affiliated with a physical entity, not an organizational one. Nitpicky? Yes, but necessary for the sake of accuracy. Welcome back, by the way. :) Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:57, March 1, 2011 (UTC)
- I added it mainly because Resbin is a member of the Senate and represents Sneeve in the Senate. In a way, he is specifically affiliated to the planetary government. Kilson 20:32, March 1, 2011 (UTC)
- Just to clarify, I would have {{sofixit}}'d this for you, but I just wanted to know if there was a specific reason as to why you added it. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 05:47, March 1, 2011 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
I'm not entirely sure if "senator" should be capitalized in the first intro mention. Per the MOS, "A rank's name is not to be capitalized if it refers to the rank, not a person." In the clause "Jollin Resbin was a male Sneevel Senator", senator is not referring to Jollin, but to his rank.- Changed
It should be made clearer that Resbin is a senator in the bio. His "senatorship" isn't mentioned until halfway through the bio; he could be a representative like Binks or something.- Done
- And that's all from me. Welcome back, I guess. :D 1358 (Talk) 15:03, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. :) Kilson 20:47, March 5, 2011 (UTC)\
Toprawa
Unless you can show me a source that capitalizes "Act" when referring to it by that singular word, as the article does repeatedly, I would recommend just de-capping these types of mentions.- I couldn't find a source, so I de-capped them.
- As a reviewing note, some basic and easy double linking/missing linking issues throughout. Keep working on that. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:00, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you for telling me, I will work on this, and thank you for the review. Kilson 22:31, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:46, March 8, 2011 (UTC)