Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Jilruan/Legends

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Jilruan

  • Nominated by: --Eyrezer 01:06, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: When The Atlas and Starcrash combine

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Looks good! ~ SavageBob 00:49, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
  2. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 04:08, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
  3. JangFett Talk 11:21, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 20:52, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
  5. Looks good to me. Trak Nar Ramble on 05:38, September 3, 2009 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Grunny (Talk) 07:17, September 29, 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. What I could find...
    • Biology and appearance
      • "A towering and war-like species, the Jilruans had two upper limbs that ended in five-fingered hands." This sentence is worded a bit strangely, almost implying that the Jilruans had more than two arms.
        • I've worded it this way because we have no idea how many or if they have legs. Their lower bodies are covered by robes. --Eyrezer 12:20, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
    • That was pretty much it. Anything else was minor copyedit stuff that I tackled. Trak Nar Ramble on 06:30, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
  2. The wording at the end of the intro implies that the droid destroyed all of the Jilruans everywhere, whereas in the bio it seems it just crushed some attendants; please clarify. Other than that, great work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 19:43, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
    • Addressed. --Eyrezer 20:47, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
  3. A Society and culture section laying out that they lived in servitude would be appropriate. Graestan(Talk) 02:16, September 2, 2009 (UTC)
    • The Atlas doesn't actually say anything about servitude.--Eyrezer 02:35, September 2, 2009 (UTC)
      • The wording could use a tweak, then, because that is the impression I am given by the article. Graestan(Talk) 02:46, September 2, 2009 (UTC)
        • They were conquered by the Hutts and individual Jilruans work in various roles, but they are never identified as a subservient like the Klatoonians, Nikto etc are. Your proposed section would add nothing to the article, and the current wording is correct. --Eyrezer 05:37, September 2, 2009 (UTC)
          • "Having been conquered by the Hutt species, they served Hutts, t'landa Til, and Yahk-Tosh in various roles."
          • "Their desert homeworld was conquered millennia prior to the Battle of Yavin by the Hutt species, becoming part of Hutt Space. They were integrated into Hutt society as gladiators, retainers, and attendants for not only their Hutt overlords but t'landa Til and Yahk-Tosh as well."
          • This wording really makes it sound as though the Jilruans as a species were indentured to the Hutts and their allies. It should be more specific if anything in order to keep it from appearing that way if it isn't the case. Graestan(Talk) 12:03, September 2, 2009 (UTC)
            • The original source says that the Jilruans were "conquered by the Hutts millennia ago and used as attendants, retainers, gladiators by a number of Hutt clans, Yahk-Tosh warlords, and t'landa Til." IMO, the article as it currently is now accurately reflects this. If you can pinpoint where you feel it diverges, please specify, or if it is minor, make the appropriate change. --Eyrezer 01:19, September 18, 2009 (UTC)
              • This objection is not fixed. Graestan(Talk) 02:25, September 30, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 09:45, October 2, 2009 (UTC)