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Jang Li-Li

  • Nominated by: ToRsO bOy 08:21, July 24, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I need a hand in getting this approved.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:23, July 24, 2010 (UTC)
  2. —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:58, July 27, 2010 (UTC)
  3. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 07:20, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
  4. ACvote—Tommy 9281 20:30, August 6, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 23:55, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Grunny (talk) 02:16, August 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Jang is attracted to the name of the article
  • Is it possible to make a stub article regarding her first diplomatic mission?
  • The context for Dooku in the bio: " by now a Sith Lord and the leader of the Separatists" is not factually correct. It sounds like Dooku just earned the leadership of the Confederacy and just became a Sith Lord.
    • Changed ToRsO bOy 06:49, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
      • It still isn't correct as it lies. You could, however, mention Dooku eariler in the bio, since you said Dooku helped train Jang. That way later on you can say Confederate Head of State Count Dooku recollected his memories of Jang.
        • Expounded the earlier Dooku mention.--ToRsO bOy 21:23, July 29, 2010 (UTC)
          • Better, but does the source say "one of the most respected and knowledgeable Jedi at that time"? JangFett (Talk) 16:18, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
            • Reworded using Yoda's exact words.ToRsO bOy 09:10, August 6, 2010 (UTC)
  • Good so far; I'll give the article another look. As a note, be careful of tense shifting and linking to disambig pages. JangFett (Talk) 01:24, July 25, 2010 (UTC)
    • Thanks. Added new info from the CSWE ToRsO bOy 06:49, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
Objection from the weirdo
  • In the infobox, she's said to have almond eyes, yet in the P&T, she's said to have gray eyes. Which is it? Other than that, fine job.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:19, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
    • The novel used both colors. Changing it to gray. Thanks ToRsO bOy 06:49, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
Soresu
  • Following on from Kasra's objection, if there is a discrepancy with eye colour, it should be mentioned in the bts.
    • Added. Up until your objection I thought they were the same color. lol ToRsO bOy 15:32, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
  • I count two cases of incorrect tense.
  • That sentence in the P&T about her interactions with Leem is relevant to the Biography. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 10:29, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • "Dooku, who trained Li-Li during his tenure with the Jedi Order: seeing as this is rather important biographical information, this should be mentioned in the proper chronology—before her death. Please reword.
  • "I remember thinking she would do well." Can the caption of this quote be related to the specific mission/scenario, if it's known? It's more clear that way.
  • "Moments before her death, Li-Li's first reaction was to grab her lightsaber. Ventress later commented on how unusual this was, and attributed it to the Jedi's instinctive habit." How exactly is this relevant to her P&A and not her P&T? I think it would fit better in the latter than where it is now.
    • It used to be in the P&T but was moved. Anyway, I've split the sentence and moved the trait part.ToRsO bOy 06:01, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
  • Going off the utilization of the "Jedi Generals" cat, was she one? If so, that should be mentioned somewhere in the article. CC7567 (talk) 22:30, August 6, 2010 (UTC)
  • One more: "After hearing of her death, the Jedi Maks Leem fondly remembered the two of them picking vegetables for their shared dinner duties, and Li-Li's query of whether shelling Antarian peas using the Force would be an abuse of power." Seeing as the novel says that there were "laugh lines around [Li-Li's] eyes" when she said this, the book makes it sound as if she were joking, yet the article doesn't. Also, even if this is kept, her regulation of her power should belong in the P&T—the P&A should be more for highlighting her powers (what she was able to do) rather than her personality (what she felt about what she did). Please clarify. CC7567 (talk) 22:52, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
    • Moved back to PT. I'll go with her having a sense of humor then to reinforce the fact that it's a trait.ToRsO bOy 23:52, August 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:16, August 9, 2010 (UTC)