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Ikvizi
(+5)
Support
- I don't know, he might have a chance Kilson 23:00, 16 April 08 (UTC)
- Interesting enough, it gets my vote. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:44, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:05, 14 May 2008 (UTC)
- --Eyrezer 22:18, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 09:23, 29 May 2008 (UTC)
Object
- Toprawa:
Please familiarize yourself with our Layout Guide to see how a character article should be "laid out." Your intro must be greatly expanded, needs a P&T section, and a BTS couldn't hurt.Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:33, 17 April 2008 (UTC)- I have enlarged the intro and added a small BTS, but I find it a little pointless to add a P&T because we don't really know much about the character becides what's in the biography. Also, at least five GA characters that don't have P&Ts: Lii, Imperial Ace, Dorsk 81, Luminara Unduli, and Uldir Lochett. I honestly believe that this article should be a good article.
- Nonsense. A character article should never go without a P&T. Previously passed GANs without them, doesn't make the trend right. It means they passed before I started reviewing. ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:52, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
- Yeah. Every character has a Personality, even if you can only write several lines on it. You should check out Chertyl Ruluwoor (Human), a Galaxies NPC article I wrote (if only for amusement), to get an idea of how to write a P&T on a character with such little info. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:13, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
- OK, the P&T has been made, and thanks Ackbar for the Chertyl Ruluwoor (Human) page, it help a little. Kilson 15:26, 18 April 08 (UTC)
- Yeah. Every character has a Personality, even if you can only write several lines on it. You should check out Chertyl Ruluwoor (Human), a Galaxies NPC article I wrote (if only for amusement), to get an idea of how to write a P&T on a character with such little info. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:13, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
- Nonsense. A character article should never go without a P&T. Previously passed GANs without them, doesn't make the trend right. It means they passed before I started reviewing. ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:52, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
- I have enlarged the intro and added a small BTS, but I find it a little pointless to add a P&T because we don't really know much about the character becides what's in the biography. Also, at least five GA characters that don't have P&Ts: Lii, Imperial Ace, Dorsk 81, Luminara Unduli, and Uldir Lochett. I honestly believe that this article should be a good article.
Why, exactly, are we speculating that Geonosis may be his homeworld? Simply because he's Geonosian? If nothing in the game besides that supports this possibility, this needs to go.I'm still not positive anything specifically says he's from Geonosis. If the game doesn't explicitly say this, we can't assume.- Sorry about that, I thought I got rid of Geonosis, I must have missed it. Kilson likes PIE 21:04, 6 May 08 (UTC)
Also, how, specifically, is he "affiliated" with Kachirho? It would seem more pertinent to affiliate him with something akin to his scientist dealings, but since we don't know that, it's probably best to leave this blank as wellYour biography section starts out very rough, with little transition. It needs a better beginning sentence explaining who and what the character is.We'll deal with the remainder of the prose when you handle these objections.Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:48, 27 April 2008 (UTC)- OK, I got it done, I hope it's good now Kilson 16:21, 28 April 08 (UTC)
Speculation needs to go: "possibly because the research there was starting to become less peaceful and ethical"This is speculative wording. Remove the weasel word "apparently" and better reword it to read more factually: "Apparently the patrol had found him unconscious in the woods with documents stating a vile plan to do harmful experiments on many Wookiees."Please add a little context to explain who this Ovarra is: "The spacer returned to Kachiro and brought the documents to Elder Ovarra"The P&T doesn't read very encyclopedic, and seems to be laden with Original Research. Please rewrite- The P&T as you had it was much better than the changed, so I put it back. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:05, 14 May 2008 (UTC)
Please order the categories at the bottom of the page by alphabetic orderToprawa and Ralltiir 05:51, 6 May 2008 (UTC)- Got it, and if your going to add anything else, please add it all together and not at different times. It would make things quicker. Kilson 23:40, 10 May 08 (UTC)
- This way is easier for me because, with all due respect, I don't know who you are, and too many newcomers will come to the GAN page with a nomination only to leave and never come back again. As such, performing a complete review ends up being a waste of my time. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:05, 14 May 2008 (UTC)
- I understand, and thanks, I think this has actually helped me. I think it will have and easier time the next time I try to get an article nominated.
- This way is easier for me because, with all due respect, I don't know who you are, and too many newcomers will come to the GAN page with a nomination only to leave and never come back again. As such, performing a complete review ends up being a waste of my time. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:05, 14 May 2008 (UTC)
- Got it, and if your going to add anything else, please add it all together and not at different times. It would make things quicker. Kilson 23:40, 10 May 08 (UTC)
In the intro, can you add a reference to the timeframe for these events? --Eyrezer 08:37, 16 May 2008 (UTC)- Ok, I think that'll work.
- Yep, that's all that was needed. --Eyrezer 22:18, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
- Ok, I think that'll work.
Comments
- And, Kilson, we don't add bullets to the BTS anymore. Please avoid that. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:56, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
- Is it possible to get a second picture for this article? --Eyrezer 08:42, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
- While I was searching the web, I did come upon a full body picture of Ikvizi on the Star Wars Galaxies wiki, but it isn't that different form the one we already have up there. I could also put up a pretty good picture of Ovarra from the Galaxies wiki, I'll upload it if you want.