- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
Iana Percei
- Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 06:26, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: New Republic marshal?
- Date Archived: 22:02, 1 September 2023 (UTC)
- Final word count: 749 words (108 introduction, 616 body, 25 behind the scenes)
- WookieeProject (optional): WP:THR, WP:NOVELS
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Anil
- To be honest, the article body overall feels like a transcription of the novel passages relevant to Percei rather than a chronological documentation of everything we know about the character. The events mentioned in "Jedi chit-chat" in particular are just presented as Percei talking about them long after they actually happened.
- Could you provide some context about the Children of E'ronoh besides their disguise for the attack?
- Establishing the Eiram and E'ronoh War earlier in the article would improve the flow, imo, which would also give a background for the fake E'roni soldiers.
- Unless I'm missing another mention of it, the novel states that the dark-purple spots on Percei's head were "likely" from living on the sun-drenched planet.
- I think at least a portion of Percei's beliefs about leaving home belongs in the "Personality and traits" and could use some expansion (how she thinks constantly moving around is "not living," etc.)
- Is "Mon Cal" a legit IU shorthand for Mon Calamari in the current canon? The novel uses "Mon Cala" for that purpose.
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 19:48, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
Comments
- I know the intro seems short, but it didn't real make sense to summarize a bunch of dialogue there. If anyone has suggestions on bits to add I'd be happy to hear them. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 06:26, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
