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Gode Takrab

  • Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:21, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The Trade Federation has gone to Farl this time.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Made some adjustments to the prose for better flow, tackled any typos found along the way, cleaned up the image. Looking over the other objections and seeing as how they had been addressed, I'm adding my vote. Looks solid to me. Trak Nar Ramble on 20:37, May 28, 2010 (UTC)
  2. --TK-299 (Click Here) Imperial Emblem 10:16, May 30, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Thefourdotelipsis 07:57, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
  4. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 07:06, June 7, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:26, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 00:31, June 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object

AC
  • Intro: When Amidala herself attacked the Federation ground headquarters -- it sounds like she attacked it by herself. Include that there were others with her.
  • Context on the Droid control ship -- the average reader doesn't know if this thing is at the spaceport or above the planet.
  • I'm confused overall as to the fate of the holo message. In the intro you say he couldn't send it until the battle was over - does that mean he sent it later? In the body you just say he's confident they wouldn't find it. In the alternate path you say he gets to the ship, does he send it then? If possible, some clarification would be nice.
    • OS doesn't specify much, but added as much as I could. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:58, May 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • Also, I'm assuming the lead quote is the message he made. If so, you should explain this in the attribution line, since Amidala herself didn't REALLY say it.
  • "responsabilities" is spelled wrong in the lead quote; it's either a typo or needs a [sic] tag.
  • First two paragraphs of the body are short and choppy, try to combine them and make them flow.
  • Both Haako and Takrab had been assigned to the Theed Royal Palace, on the surface of Naboo, even if the Federation had a blockade of orbiting starships. If the were assigned to the palace all along this might fit better in earlier in the first or second paragraph; if he was only located there after the invasion, you should say that. Also, what does the "even if" clause have to do with anything?
  • He was also a mediocre fighter who would rather allow others to protect his integrity Integrity doesn't seem to fit here, I think you mean life?
  • as was the norm with Neimoidians. Is this explicitly stated in the source? Otherwise it seems a bit speculative.
    • page 86: "Like most Neimoidians, he is terrified of personal harm, so even one character with a blaster is sufficient to hold him." Not changed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:58, May 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • Even then, Takrab was unable to send his forgeries I'm assuming he can't because he was captured at this time? - if so, say this.
    • Not neccessarily. The canon path only specifies that Takrab didn't reach the Lucrehulk, but he might have escaped from his captors. OS doesn't specify wether he did or not. Thus, not changed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:58, May 28, 2010 (UTC)Ah,
      • Ah, I see. I added the fact that he didn't reach the ship; hope you don't mind. One last question: you say they find the hologram, but is it known whether or not the treaty in TC-11 was found? A Christian 16:40, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
  • A word or two of context on RK-7, also on what his friend-or-foe identifier was for.
  • The CUSWE gives information saying that he was dispatched to Naboo to gather information on Queen Amidala's handwriting, also that he tried to bribe his way to freedom. Is there a reason this isn't mentioned in the article?
    • Added. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:58, May 28, 2010 (UTC)
      • I'm afraid you may have misunderstood me here. It's not from the Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia but the CUSWE website. The info is supposedly from Secrets of Naboo according to the CUSWE. Try to find where the info is in case there's other missed things there as well. A Christian 16:40, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
        • Oh, I see. After thoroughly re-reading the OS, I can find no reference to the handwriting. I'm leaving the "bribery" part, even if it is only a possible —yet likely— alternative scenario in the "light side path". --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:21, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
  • A Christian 22:23, May 27, 2010 (UTC)
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  • You should probably elaborate a little bit on how the Battle of Naboo turns out. As it is, it assumes a bit to much about what the reader knows about TPM. Also, you can take that image as establishing that it is indeed Sia-Lan Wezz and her pals who stop Takrab. Thefourdotelipsis 07:16, May 30, 2010 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Please link the leading quote to Takrab somehow. It doesn't have any significance otherwise. CC7567 (talk) 03:05, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
Blah
  • Does Peril on Naboo say that Neimoidians are cowardly, because you have it sourced to that. Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:42, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
    • I don't find a direct reference to that. If you mean "The possibility of suffering physical damage intimidated him, as was the norm with Neimoidians", it's on page 86: "Like most Neimoidians, he [Takrab] is terrified of personal harm (…)". --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:37, June 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:31, June 9, 2010 (UTC)