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Gjon

  • Nominated by: Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:28, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: After trying desperately to get it to 1000 words, I got stuck at 957, so I'm putting it through this process in hopes that it'll get expanded when people point out things I'm missing.

(3 AC/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Nice job. Hope I got you to 1000 words. Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:40, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
  2. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 04:39, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
  3. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 19:54, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote --Eyrezer 03:44, 16 December 2008 (UTC)
  5. ACvote - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:28, 8 January 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. Toprawa:
    • How is Fett riding up through the atmosphere here? "However, Fett discovered that his ship was missing and, with the help of Aia, was able to ride the winds up through Bogg 4's atmosphere and into Bogg 11's exosphere as the moon's atmospheres briefly crossed."
      • This part is confusing in the book, and not very well-explained. Aia can fly, sort of, (more like gliding upwards) up through one moon's atmosphere and then can cross over to another moon when the atmospheres overlap. The overlapping atmospheres do funky things to the gravity, making some patches in the air with essentially no gravity. It's called riding the vectors by Aia. He simply holds Fett when they go after Gjon using this method. I'm not quite sure how to explain this, but I'll do my best.
    • How, exactly, did they lose the credits when the ship accelerated? Did they flight out the hatch? "While the three had avoided death, they had lost almost all the credits they had stolen when the Slave I accelerated."
      • Added.
    • This kind of smells like a combination of OR/POV. Can you elaborate on this at all? "as he did have a sense of honor, though it was quite different from what many considered honor"
      • I reworded this, and I think it's better now.
    • Nothing touches on this in the biography. Please elaborate: " he gave the ambitious young Human advice when the two parted ways." Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:34, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
  2. Forgive me if I'm wrong but I vaguely seem to remember Gjon stealing something of Fett's as they departed. That's why he insisted on giving Fett the remaining 100 creds and told him not to be too trusting (of Gjon). I think Fett discovered his treachery in a later installment in the series when he had to pay for food or docking fees. He was missing credits or something (got kinda pissed off too). If this is the case, you will have to change the biography and the last part of the P&T. And for the record, I bet I'm younger than you (can tell by the pic on your page).SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 00:46, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
    • It was Aia, not Gjon. The word "money" in the quote is supposed to be spelled with two "m's", BTW. And I'm 16, so it looks you like you are younger than me. Although I don't have a picture on my page, so you must have been looking at Toprawa's. :) Chack Jadson (Talk) 13:39, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
  3. The Floydmeister:
    • "Fett accelerated the Slave I, throwing the security officer off-balance, allowing Gjon and Aia to push him out the ship's open hatch, although the money they had stolen flew out during the scuffle." I don't like this sentence. Split it up and/or reword it.
    • And...that's it. Good job. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 22:48, 3 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 13:28, 8 January 2009 (UTC)