Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Githany

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Githany

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Support

  1. QuentinGeorge 11:54, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
  2. Kilson 22:47, 16 April 08 (UTC)
  3. Copy-edited.—Tommy9281(Lússë i Morë Hwesta súya!) 01:48, 25 April 2008 (UTC)
  4. Go Bachs. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:32, 25 April 2008 (UTC)
  5. I thought I voted when I struck... 9_9 Greyman@wikiajanitor(Talk) 22:44, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
  6. ajeanette 20 May 2008
  7. Thanks to Goodwood and Tommy for stepping in on this one. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:38, 4 June 2008 (UTC)

Object

  1. Minor objection, but the information in the succession box at the bottom needs to be sourced like you would with an infobox. Other than that, the article reads well :) Greyman Jan.png (Talk) 02:06, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
  2. Toprawa:
    • Please add a little bit to give the thought bomb some context as to what it is here: "she abandoned her fellow Sith Lords when she learned of Kaan's desire to use the thought bomb"
      • Looks like someone has already taken care of that. QuentinGeorge 23:45, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
    • The paragraph beginning "Bane survived using the dark side to purge" really digresses from the central theme of this article - Githany - and large parts are highly irrelevant. I would suggest cutting out the fat
      • I agree. Not sure why that was there. QuentinGeorge 23:45, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
    • This is introduced very roughly, and needs to be explained - what is the thought bomb, who is unleashing it, what is its intended purpose? "The thought bomb was about to be unleashed"
    • Please elaborate on this a little bit. Her true thoughts concerning what? "Despite her extroverted personality, Githany kept her true feelings closely guarded."
    • Need to avoid this speculation. If you can't reword this to do, I would suggest removing this sentence entirely: "Githany most likely held the same powers and abilities of most Jedi or Sith of her time."
    • The information under the "Appearance" section should be merged with the "Personality and traits."
      • Disagree with that, but if that's what the MoS says, I will do so. QuentinGeorge 23:45, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure where this quote is coming from, but it needs to be attributed to someone. I would suggest paraphrasing this instead for cleaner prose: "perfect examples of the human female form."
      • That's exactly how PoD describes her. QuentinGeorge 23:45, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
        • So you're quoting prose? That's not how we write articles. Please paraphrase. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:49, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
          • Addressed.—Tommy(There are no Jedi here) 11:00, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
            • This needs to be supplemented by crediting this to someone as describing her as such, instead of saying this because the OOU prose describes her like this. Who, from an IU perspective, describes her as being perfect?: "her face and figure were both described as perfect examples of the Human female form." Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:19, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
    • Please cut the speculation: "which may have been of Sith design."
    • Ditto on the speculation: "feelings no doubt enhanced by Kaan's potent mind manipulation abilities."
      • That's exactly what the book says. Kaan uses his mind manipulation to increase her attraction to her. QuentinGeorge 23:45, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
    • Your "Kaan" and "Darovit" subsections under the "Relationships" section are unnecessary. Such a section should be reserved for serious romantic relationships, not an individual analysis of every person she interacted with. You may choose to rewrite and insert some of this information into the P&T. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:16, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
      • That rule is totally ridiculous and stupid, considering Kaan and Darovit are not just "people she interacts with", but looks like someone already deleted that so I will leave it. QuentinGeorge 23:45, 9 May 2008 (UTC)

Comments

  • Just a little formatting pointer, always make sure you put punctuation before reference tags. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:16, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
    • I've addressed whatever objections are left, I believe, so if noone else has any issues with this, it is ready to finally be moved.—Tommy(There are no Jedi here) 11:06, 3 June 2008 (UTC)