- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Gavrilonnis Tejere
- Nominated by: Menkooroo 17:26, August 5, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Pumping myself up to finish Elis Helrot.
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Support
- There was a third shooter! ~Savage
14:59, August 6, 2011 (UTC) - Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 14:12, August 7, 2011 (UTC) - Talrrivanian
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CC7567 (talk) 00:58, August 13, 2011 (UTC)- Kilson(Let's have a chat) 17:36, August 19, 2011 (UTC)
- --Eyrezer 04:35, August 20, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Attack of the Clone
This is a rather minor one, but can the Yag'Dhul Ambassadorial Landing Platform really be counted as an affiliation for him? I realize that he worked at the platform, but the platform is…well, a platform, not an organization with which individuals are normally affiliated. I think it would be more prudent to list his affiliation as the organization that he worked for (or the one that owned the platform), if it's known; if not, I would suggest removing it for clarity.- No organization is mentioned, so I've gone and removed the platform.
Even if his motives aren't known, is there enough for a P&T if you simply say that he sabotaged the platform (and perhaps that he endangered the safety of others)? I know that this would simply repeat Bio info, but in some cases that's what we do—it's the most that can be said of his personality right now, even without his motives. See what you think.CC7567 (talk) 19:43, August 10, 2011 (UTC)- You're right. I really should have included a p & t from the beginning, especially since we can say a few things about his physical appearance. Added, and thanks for the review. Menkooroo 07:09, August 12, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson
Could you put the first two sentences of the Intro in chronological order. You start it off with how Tejere sabotaged the platform, mention when he was born, and then jump back to him sabotaging the platform. As a result, it reads a bit oddly to me.- Yeah, I can rejig it if you want. But! Hear me out: What I've gone for here is an attempt to make the first sentence of the intro a kind of general-catch-all statement about the character rather than the earliest chronological thing we know, as I've done in Lumpy and others, and as the entire first paragraph does in Darth Caedus. I've seen Inquisitors object to the intro's opening sentence being about a character's birth when it could instead be something that tells you about the most well-documented part of their life. Whaddya think? Menkooroo 03:37, August 18, 2011 (UTC)
- I suppose that works, considering he is known for the attempted sabotage. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 17:36, August 19, 2011 (UTC)
- Yeah, I can rejig it if you want. But! Hear me out: What I've gone for here is an attempt to make the first sentence of the intro a kind of general-catch-all statement about the character rather than the earliest chronological thing we know, as I've done in Lumpy and others, and as the entire first paragraph does in Darth Caedus. I've seen Inquisitors object to the intro's opening sentence being about a character's birth when it could instead be something that tells you about the most well-documented part of their life. Whaddya think? Menkooroo 03:37, August 18, 2011 (UTC)
- Otherwise, good job Menk. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 18:31, August 16, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 08:25, August 20, 2011 (UTC)
- No p&t since his motives aren't known. Menkooroo 17:26, August 5, 2011 (UTC)