- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Galney (Lady)
- Nominated by: IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 03:04, 28 October 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Now we have TWO Galney noms! BWAHAHAHAHA!
(3 AC/2 users/5 total)
Support
DC 02:25, 29 October 2008 (UTC)- You sure like to use commas a lot. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 10:04, 29 October 2008 (UTC)
- —Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 04:01, 3 November 2008 (UTC) 
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 21:42, 16 November 2008 (UTC)- Good work! Qui-Gon Reborn 04:36, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- DC
Mention in the info that Galney gave the info to her consort unknowingly.- Addressed.
Mention Ducha Galney in the intro as well, and give context to her.- Addressed.
Young Chume'da is POVish. Use other words to describe Allana.- Addressed.
Why did Galney burst out in anger to the GA providing a defense fleet?- Addressed.
I believe you could add a few more things to the P&T.- Addressed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 02:20, 29 October 2008 (UTC)
- Good article. DC 02:08, 29 October 2008 (UTC)
- Hammertime:
However, it was revealed that Galney had nothing to do with the assassination attempt, but had unknowingly given inside information to a consort who was a trator to the throne. We've already discussed this "a consort". Who was he/she the consort of? I let you slide on the article creaton for this individual on the Ducha nom, but I'm cracking the whip now.- Addressed.
Also, that sentence could be slightly reworded to read a little better.- Addressed.
Eliminate underlinking. Make sure things are linked once in the intro, and once upon first mention in the body.- Addressed.
Per Soresu up there. You sure do enjoy the use of commas. See if you can't substitute a few semicolons, or reword or split several sentences so that they aren't so long. If you need clarification/assistance, summon me to IRC.- Addressed.
...Led by Galney's older sister, the Ducha of Terephon. What's Terephon? Only a single word of context is necessary.- Addressed.
You and I have also discussed quote formatting for two-person, single-line apiece exchanges. Please rectify.- Addressed.
I know his significance is probably minor at best, but who is Sergeant Darb? You inroduce him as though we already know who dude is. Was he a Hapan Sergeant? A crewman on the Anakin Solo? Please add a note of context there.- Addressed.
Soon after, the Battle of Hapes broke out. Soon after what? The prom? Christmas? Some context please ;)- Heh. Addressed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 18:19, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
- Good job, though Ducha Galney was more fun.—Tommy9281 (Peace is a lie) 14:11, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
- From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One:
Context is need on the original assassination attempt on Tenel Ka in both the intro and bio.- Addressed.
Context on why a GA defense fleet was being assembled is needed - are they being devoted to the defense of the Hapan crown?- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 09:21, 11 November 2008 (UTC)- Addressed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 01:06, 14 November 2008 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 09:46, 25 November 2008 (UTC)