- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Gaharrag
- Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 Wednesday, June 1, 2011, 00:36 UTC
- Nomination comments: And just when I thought I was gonna miss it, ship hasn't sailed quite yet! My late entry to the barn-burner!
(5 ACs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
- Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:21, June 1, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson(Let's have a chat) 22:29, June 1, 2011 (UTC)- The Conviction noms have arrived… Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:26, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
- Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:38, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
Grunny (talk) 03:16, June 2, 2011 (UTC)- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:29, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Kilson
"Gaharrag was an adult male Wookiee," OK, so if he's male, why isn't the Sexes field of the infobox filled in? :P- Addressed.
In the Bio, "The Wookiee gangster was a time of recess when Veila was mistakenly brought to the same exercise yard occupied by the majority of the prison's male population—Gaharrag included." You're wording is a bit confusing here, it would be better here to say, "The Wookiee gangster was in a time of recess at the exercise yard occupied by the majority of the prison's male population when Veila was mistakenly brought to the same exercise yard." or something along those lines.- Addressed.
"Taunting ensued as inmates prepared to attack, but Veila preceded them..." Them who? The taunts? The inmates?- Yes.
"With a great roar Gaharrag charged again as the Hutt fell and Veila smote a Bothan opponent." "Smote" can mean to "to kill" or "to slay", and I believe that is not the case here. You should probably replace it with "incapacitate" or something else along those lines.- Addressed.
- Otherwise, good job. Likely one of the more...interesting articles I've read since I've gotten back....:P Kilson(Let's have a chat) 20:51, June 1, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa
Just one. Pretty sure "warcries" should be two words: "...he bellowed ceremonial Wookiee warcries designed..."Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:27, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:29, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
- I don't think it's really necessary to break up the bio into sections, but I won't make an objection of it if you'd like to keep it as is. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:26, June 2, 2011 (UTC)