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Flame-colored robes

  • Nominated by: —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 01:28, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
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  1. D MCCG D MCCG (chat) 03:12, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
  2. VergenceScatter (talk) 01:34, 29 July 2021 (UTC)

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Erebus
  • The designer should be included in the Description.
  • You have a duplicate link for the Naboo Royal Starship in History.
  • Currently, the second paragraph of History is one large sentence. Please split it into two or more sentences.
  • In the BTS, please provide the release date for Star Wars: The Visual Encyclopedia as you do not already. Only the year is necessary.
  • Since there does not seem to be a Legends counterpart to the robes, mentioning that Queen's Peril is a canon novel is unnecessary. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 04:28, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Found a few more:
    • Please be careful of underlinking as I previously made note of on Onoam (this is not a reviewing note).
      • Caught a few more places where I could add one! —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 05:38, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Context for Coruscant and the Clone Wars.
      • Added some for Coruscant. Will need to investigate BF2 a little more to figure out how to contextualize the Clone Wars for this reference to them. (Not 100% sure why Clone Wars is the only reference point for time with this portion of the game). —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 05:38, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
        • The context I was referring to was that you need to mention that Coruscant was a planet. As for the Clone Wars, you only need to mention that it was fought between the Republic and Confederacy.
          • Ah! Done. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 16:59, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
            • Clone Wars context is still missing.
              • Clone Wars context added. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 23:20, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
    • A little more context for the Invasion of Naboo, please. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 04:32, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Expanded that bit. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 05:38, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
        • Made a copy-edit.
  • Full names for both the Republic and Empire, please, since that's their first mentions. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 15:47, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Oh, good point, done. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 16:59, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
  • You currently do not have the type field filled out in the infobox.
  • Since there is now a Legends counterpart, you will have to specify that the Visual Encyclopedia and the novel are canon.
  • See my change here and let me know if you have any issues or questions. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 20:12, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Makes sense! Slowly learning to get an eye for everything that needs to be linked/graceful ways to do so. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 23:20, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
Vergence
  • There's a number of BTS terms that could use Wikipedia links. VergenceScatter (talk) 06:42, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
  • The paragraph on pinups mentions several planets that could use context.
  • Is it really necessary to say that Soruna's handmaidens "wore robes identical to the flame-colored robes worn by Amidala's handmaidens" instead of just saying that they wore flame colored robes?
    • I guess it depends how narrowly we define the robes? They're not a long-standing cultural style like Jubilation dress, but a specific set of garments created by Yané that appear to have been replicated. (Although I suppose they could have been the same ones passed down; we know queens' garments and headdresses are preserved and passed from monarch to monarch). Minnabird Naboo (talk) 21:12, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Just making sure you're good with this. VergenceScatter (talk) 20:56, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Escaping Naboo can use {{Shortstory}}.
  • Full release dates needed for the novel and film.
    • Did them for both the novelization and the novel, as I wasn't sure which you meant and it seems more info doesn't hurt. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 23:20, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Since there are only three history paragraphs, subsectioning is unneeded.
    • I went in and added actual context for the use in SE, so now they are needed! Probably. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 23:20, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
  • No more quotes? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 17:36, 11 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Added! One is a bit of a stretch but there's not a lot of dialogue focused on these. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 23:20, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Intro can be beefed up a bit.
  • Naboo culture is infobox-exclusive.
    • Changed infobox reference to Naboo (people) and gave fashion context in history section including a link to the same page. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 12:18, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
  • The bts bit about Queen's Peril seems unnecessary to me. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 02:51, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Excellent. Deleted it. —Minnabird Naboo (talk) 12:18, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
  • I think you're missing a ref here: "At least one other queen's retinue also wore similar robes."
    • It was meant as a transition sentence but I've sourced it to SE3. Minnabird Naboo (talk) 19:58, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Can "The robes were worn to complement two of the Queen's outfits during the events surrounding the Invasion of Naboo" really be sourced to TPM? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 17:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Expanded that thought a bit, as the idea of complementing was made explicit in QP. Minnabird Naboo (talk) 19:58, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Missing {{Mediacat}}.
    • Ooh that's how you make those! Done. Minnabird Naboo (talk) 20:36, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
      • For the future, that would go underneath appearances, sources, or notes + refs per WP:LG#Mediacat.
  • How do the robes appear in TCW? Is there anything there worth mentioning in the article? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 20:22, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Added them to appearances, totally forgot to mention them. It's there now. (I'm relying on whoever wrote Handmaiden pin-up, I have not spotted the posters). Minnabird Naboo (talk) 20:36, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
      • You'll need to check those episodes for yourself, then. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 20:42, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
        • At last, knocked out my to-do list on this, including this point! Minnabird Naboo (talk) 19:19, 25 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Intro is still a bit too short for all the content you have in the body. Maybe add a bit more on the invasion of Naboo or something.
    • Expanded intro to cover the major points in the article. Minnabird Naboo (talk) 18:24, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Should be split into two paragraphs now.
  • I'd slightly modify the first two quote attributions in the body to explain how they relate to the robes.
    • Modified the second, replaced the first. Hopefully a little more apt? Usually if I have a section without quotes, someone asks if there are more quotes, but it's hard to find dialogue specifically about the robes! Minnabird Naboo (talk) 18:24, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
  • A date for the invasion of Naboo would be appreciated.
  • It's fine to split the conception and naming stuff, but I think the bts should still open with what they were designed/created for.
  • You're missing a ref for the junior novel in the bts. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 22:03, 25 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Good catch, thank you! Minnabird Naboo (talk) 18:24, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Surely the Description can be expanded. The inclusion of a hood warrants a mention, as does the red waistband(?). As an aside, the article currently stands at 999 words by my count, so any expansion no matter how minor will bring this article above the 1,000 word threshold. 1358 (Talk) 17:44, 11 August 2021 (UTC)

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