Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Finn's Sith apprentice

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Finn's Sith apprentice

  • Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:07, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This goes with the articles on Finn and Marka. A major loser, this guy…

(3 ACs/7 Users/10 Total)

Support

  1. Pre-nom reviewed. —Master Jonathan New Jedi Order (Jedi Council Chambers) 01:09, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Place of death ? Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:10, June 7, 2010 (UTC)
  3. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:28, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  4. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 10:42, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Nice JangFett (Talk) 19:08, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Menkooroo 06:16, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
  7. --Gmalek (The ability to edit does not make you intelligent) 01:16, June 29, 2010 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote --Eyrezer 02:48, July 1, 2010 (UTC)
  9. Because this needs more uservotes. -- 1358 (Talk) 12:13, July 1, 2010 (UTC)
  10. ACvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:10, July 3, 2010 (UTC)

Object

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Fett
  • Please note that all conjectural titled articles must start with "This."
  • Why is Human male in bold, and not "apprentice"? Since Finn and Sith apprentice are part of the conjectural-titled article name, it would make better sense.
  • "Finn and his pupil traveled to a planet and planted a bomb in a building." Why did they go to that planet and plant a bomb in a building? I see the same problem with the bio as well, and it's the same wording as it appears in the intro.
    • It's not specified in the comic or any other source.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:14, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • First of all, I don't understand what's going on in the first few sentences of the intro. Who hired them to go to that planet and destroy some building? Particularly this sentence: "After he and Finn concluded business with an individual," makes it confusing.
    • Same as above. In the comic, an individual hands Finn something in the building, after Finn and the apprentice depart, it blows up.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:14, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • "On the way to the ship, the apprentice murdered the Toydarian slave owner Lod in order to free the female Marka." Why? Also, who is this Marka? Context would be great, as she is mentioned in later parts of the intro.
  • "Finn promptly rebuked the young man for this and continued to the ship." - PBP
  • How did Finn know Marka was Force-sensitive?
  • The continuous usage of "man" is very tiresome, and gets confusing. It would be better if you say "apprentice" in some parts.
  • After his death, did Finn take Marka as his apprentice or not? A brief mentioning would be good to tie up loose ends.
  • In the P&T, mention that he showed compassion and helped out a slave. It would be an interesting bit, as you originally mentioned it in the bio.
  • That's all. JangFett (Talk) 15:59, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
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  • Does the individual that they have business with appear in the comic? If so, an article and a link are in order. Menkooroo 16:18, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • The only non-infobox image of the apprentice cuts off his head --- can the image of Finn be replaced with one of the apprentice? There've like... gotta be some good ones in the comic, man! Menkooroo 16:18, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
    • JMAS is uploading an image of Marka helping the apprentice up after Finn punches him to the ground.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:33, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
Chack
  • I have to disagree with Jang. I think it'd make more sense if "Human male" was bolded. I talked to him on IRC and he says that's fine.
  • "He informed Finn, who was already aware of Marka's connection with the Force, and was instructed to deal with her. However, he and Marka met Finn as the Sith Master was boarding the ship." Not a great flow. Is it possible to just say "however, he did not do so, and later met Finn at his ship with the apprentice," or something?
  • Was it Finn's ship, or their ship? I assume it was Finn's, but I'll check still.
  • Good work. Chack Jadson (Talk) 18:22, June 23, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 06:53, July 3, 2010 (UTC)