Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/FEX-M3 nerve gas grenade

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FEX-M3 nerve gas grenade

Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:17, August 29, 2011 (UTC)
Looks good. <-Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 15:26, August 30, 2011 (UTC)
Other than a few links that I fixed, good.--Talrrivanian ^{(Headquarters)} 11:47, August 31, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 16:03, September 7, 2011 (UTC)
1358 ^(Talk) 18:19, September 7, 2011 (UTC)
Menkooroo 15:10, September 18, 2011 (UTC)

In the History section, "The team made their way to the factory, and Marrt went there alone, leaving the other clone troopers in hiding nearby." This sentence is a bit unclear because you first state that the team is going to the factory, but then you say that Marrt went there by himself. Try rephrasing it more to make it more clear.
- Addressed.
Otherwise, good job Jinn. Thanks for your hard work for the barn-burner. :) Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 15:58, August 31, 2011 (UTC)
- Glad to help. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 17:08, September 6, 2011 (UTC)

There are a few details at the end of the bio that kinda seem irrelevant to the grenade. Everything in the final paragraph following "After the mission" would be essential in a summary of A Trooper's Tale, but for the purposes of an article about the grenade, is it necessary to mention that Marrt went to Sacorria, to namedrop Ahsoka and Kit Fisto, or include the detail that Marrt asked the Jedi to send a representative to meet him? In order to keep things focused on the article's subject, I wonder if skipping right from "Tonith escaped" to "The data records exposed the traitorous senators" might be all that the article needs to say. Thoughts? Menkooroo 04:16, September 15, 2011 (UTC)
- OK, done. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 16:56, September 15, 2011 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:30, September 18, 2011 (UTC)