- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Event Horizon (battlecruiser)
- Nominated by: 501st Dogma
(Comlink) 23:48, April 17, 2012 (UTC) - Nomination comments:My copy of Warfare is starting to fall apart at the seams....
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Support
- Looks good <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 00:24, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Clone Commander Lee Talk 20:24, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
Good work.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 00:44, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 09:23, May 23, 2012 (UTC)- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:32, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
Object
Omicron
Needs a BTS section.- Sorry about that. Added it. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 00:18, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Sorry about that. Added it. 501st Dogma
Personally I would change the last sentence from "seceded" to "surrendered" or something.- Done. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 00:18, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. 501st Dogma
and their ion weaponry soon overloaded four warships - I would reword that to something like disabled the ships or overloaded the ships systems or something.<-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 00:11, April 18, 2012 (UTC)- Changed. Thanks for the review. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 00:18, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Changed. Thanks for the review. 501st Dogma
Lee's charge
Overlinking in the infobox. Also dates come before places.- Better? 501st Dogma(Comlink) 20:12, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Better? 501st Dogma
Link for the virus.- Done. I'll make the article soon. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 20:12, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Please do this, as redlinks are not allowed in the intro.
- Done. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 20:18, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. 501st Dogma
- Please do this, as redlinks are not allowed in the intro.
- Done. I'll make the article soon. 501st Dogma
While I'm fine that you keep the New Republic in the infobox, you should add a note that they controlled it by the virus.- Noted. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 20:12, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
Sorry for my unclear wording I actually thought about some brackets like: New Republic {{C|controlled by [[Coded eraser virus}}.Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:48, April 19, 2012 (UTC)- Done. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 20:18, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. 501st Dogma
- Noted. 501st Dogma
the Republic astromechs: I believe that they did not "belong" to the Republic, so please say that were controlled by the virus.- Not sure if they were controlled, so I despicified. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 20:12, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Not sure if they were controlled, so I despicified. 501st Dogma
- Good job. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:46, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
Mention that the New Republic is the Alliance.Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:48, April 19, 2012 (UTC)- Sorry, where do you want that? 501st Dogma(Comlink) 20:18, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
- I fixed it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 20:23, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Sorry, where do you want that? 501st Dogma
Cav
Shouldn't the article be titled Event Horizon (battlecruiser) with a lower case "b". The source supports a lower case.- Fixed.
Likewise, the source only states that Event Horizon is a battlecruiser, not a Star Battlecruiser. Nit-picky? Yes. Accurate? Yes.- Fixed.
The Event Horizon was a Star Battlecruiser, part of the Imperial aligned Kuati Sector Forces as of 8.5 ABY, during the Galactic Civil War, a time when the Galactic Empire fought against the Alliance to Restore the Republic and later its successor state, the New Republic. - nothing states that the Event Horizon was part of the fleet during that time. Only that the Event Horizon was there in 8 ABY. That statement makes it seem that Event Horizon was stationed there for years, which is unconfirmed.- Better?
the Event Horizon was part of the Imperial Kuati Sector Forces[1] in 8.5 ABY[2], during the Galactic Civil War, in which the Alliance to Restore the Republic, who would later be known as the New Republic shorly after their victory at Endor, fought against the Galactic Empire - this is a choppy, uneven and confusing sentence, jumping from 8.5 to 4 ABY in reverse chronological order. All that needs to be known is that the New Republic was fighting the Empire in 8.5 ABY, not the history.- Unhistorifyed.
When hailed by a representative of the New Republic, - lets not keep him anonymous. At least namecheck him and his position within the NR.- Named and contexted.
Why is it categorised as a Super Star Destroyer? It's a battlecruiser.- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 12:42, April 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Changed catt. Like the Aurora, I'll have to make that catt. Thanks for the review. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 20:58, April 24, 2012 (UTC)
- Changed catt. Like the Aurora, I'll have to make that catt. Thanks for the review. 501st Dogma
A description section could probably be written for it.- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 00:08, May 7, 2012 (UTC)
One more: no mention of the NR gaining majority shareholding in KDY? Pretty big plot point.- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 12:34, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
- I put the New Republic under the affiliation section in the infobox because of the virus. If thats not a legitamate reason to, I'll remove it. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 23:48, April 17, 2012 (UTC)
- Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:32, May 29, 2012 (UTC)