Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Erv Lekauf

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Erv Lekauf

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Support

  1. As nominator. Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:19, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
  2. Gooooood. Greyman Jan.png (Talk) 02:13, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
  3. Great article. I fixed something extremely minor for you.—Tommy9281(Lússë i Morë Hwesta súya!) 14:58, 24 April 2008 (UTC)
  4. Very well done. - JMAS Hey, it's me! 19:08, 24 April 2008 (UTC)
  5. Darth Vader's secret lover. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:51, 26 April 2008 (UTC)

Object

  1. Please source his birth year in the infobox. I can't remember where it's from, otherwise I would have done it :P Greyman Jan.png (Talk) 00:16, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
    • I don't recall it being hinted at anywhere, so I removed it. I also switched the pictures. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:23, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
  2. Toprawa:
    • Vader ordered the execution of this guy as a result of Lekauf defying him? Please reword: "Vader ordered the execution of the head of the company, Tef Shabiak, as a result"
    • Although I've fixed these issues for you and this is not an objection, I strongly urge you to do a far better job of HTML linking perfection next time. Ex: Don't like "Darth Vader" to such; link him to "Anakin Skywalker," as appropriate.
      • Yeah, that's just laziness. I do need to do a better job of that in the future.
    • Please reword to avoid starting the sentence with "though" and starting another clause in the same sentence with "although.": "Though Vader Force choked him, Cuis would not reveal his master, although Vader"
    • What six clones? Six clones were made of him? Should clarify: "Lekauf felt honored by this request. A year later when the six clones were old enough,"
    • They're practicing this against themselves? "One of the things he taught them was the art of sword combat, something they practiced against the Cuis clones."
      • I guess I went in and changed that for you. Not sure why I objected to it. :P Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:32, 24 April 2008 (UTC)
    • So, he's the apprentice of Palpatine now? This is a very rough transition, since you never identify him as such previously. Please do so to clarify, or otherwise specify who this apprentice may be: "and decided to head back to Coruscant with his apprentice"
    • I might argue "selfless" is a bit POV. At any rate, please choose a more neutral term: "thanks to Vader's quick and selfless actions"
      • Fixed.
    • And what did his grandfather say? Please specify: "Jori once recounted to Jacen Solo what his grandfather had told him about Darth Vader."
      • Fixed.
    • Brief descriptor for Tra'avis here, please: "Lekauf's mutilation was partially a "retaliation" for Kaufman killing off Tra'avis"
      • Addressed.
    • Your BTS could really be expanded. In what did he first appear? Where was he first identified by name? What purpose did the character serve? Antagonist? Protagonist? Etc. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:52, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

  • A suggestion, really: I think that the second picture in the article would better suit the infobox, since it shows Lekauf when he's not beaten into a bloody pulp, and near death, lol. Just a suggestion, Greyman Jan.png (Talk) 00:16, 14 April 2008 (UTC)