Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Emarr Ottkreg

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Emarr Ottkreg

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:01, February 25, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Time for some more Imperial nominations

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Cwedin(talk) 19:45, February 25, 2016 (UTC)
  2. Manoof (talk) 11:33, May 1, 2016 (UTC)
  3. Lewisr --Lewisr (talk) 16:39, May 1, 2016 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:08, June 30, 2016 (UTC)
  5. ACvote You're going to have to be more attentive with your linking in the future. IFYLOFD (Talk) 22:02, July 3, 2016 (UTC)

Object

Cwedin
  • Could you add a picture of the battle? Cwedin(talk) 19:33, February 25, 2016 (UTC)
    • I did look for an image before nominating the article but couldn't find any that I thought looked that relevant. I've added one of the Imperial Fleet, but if you have a different image in mind feel free to change it and we'll see how it looks. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:41, February 25, 2016 (UTC)
      • Looks good to me! Cwedin(talk) 19:45, February 25, 2016 (UTC)
Manoof
  • Context on Pondakree. I see it is a planet, but is that actually established? Manoof (talk) 10:53, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
    • There's no context for it in new canon other than it being his homeworld. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:21, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
      • Can you mention it is a planet or his homeworld in the article proper then. Currently the only indication it is a planet is in the infobox. Manoof (talk) 07:46, May 1, 2016 (UTC)
        • We don't know that it is a planet though only that it's his homeworld. It could easily be a moon. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:58, May 1, 2016 (UTC)
          • Good point, well thought! Manoof (talk) 11:33, May 1, 2016 (UTC)
  • Could we get some clarity on "After the agent asked how Sloane had identified three distant CR90 corvettes during a command..."? I ask as "a command" is a bit ambiguous. Manoof (talk) 10:53, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
    • Added a bit more detail. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:21, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
  • You say sapphire squadron is the ships complement on star fighters. Strictly speaking, that would all the TIEs assigned to the ship, which could be 72 fighters, which is an unusually large squadron. Just wanting to make sure of the details here. Manoof (talk) 10:53, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
    • Changed to say it was only part of the ship's contingent. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:21, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
  • Do we know if vigilance is an Imperial I or Imperial II class? Manoof (talk) 10:53, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
  • Was she informed of the DSII's communication/chain of command issues by the DSII or her comm officer? If the former, then she got her communications from the death star. Was she asking for orders, rather than communication? Manoof (talk) 10:53, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
    • She was informed by her comm officer Ives, which I've now added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:21, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
  • Ottkreg refused to believe what was true? the breakdown of communication from the DSII, the lack of orders from the throne room? the emperor's death? Manoof (talk) 10:53, April 30, 2016 (UTC)
Lewisr
  • Communications officer currently redirects to a legends article, would you be able to create a canon page to correct this? --Lewisr (talk) 11:08, May 1, 2016 (UTC)
Cav
  • I've redlinked lake-diver in the PT quote which needs creation. Also, can his comment be construed as something he did back on his homeworld (catching lake-divers) and if so then it needs to be worked into either the bio or PT. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 16:15, June 3, 2016 (UTC)
    • Created the article, but I don't know we should assume that he personally caught lake divers, as it might simply be a phrase from his homeworld. For example I've said "as easy as shooting fish in a barrel" but have never done so myself. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:33, June 7, 2016 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • For starters, I'd like to see you subsection the Bio into at least two subsections, which gives you an opportunity to add more quotes and images if available. Secondly, the article will benefit greatly from paragraph breaks in the second and last paragraphs. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:05, July 6, 2016 (UTC)
  • I notice that the article capitalizes the term "Rebels" throughout the article, but as far as I know, canon source have been just about universally consistent in not capitalizing the term, as evidenced by the Bio section's lead quote. Can you comment on this?
    • An objection on a previous article some time ago left me under the impression that the "official" rebels from the Alliance were capitalized in text while other groups like Berch Teller's cell were not. I've decapitalized it now since this doesn't really seem to be the case. Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:38, July 6, 2016 (UTC)
  • Referencing issue: In the infobox, you reference his COMPNOR affiliation to Tarkin. However, Ottkreg does not appear in Tarkin, so this information does not come directly from that source. Therefore, you should write a note explaining how you're extrapolating this information. Something like "'The Levels of Power' establishes that Emarr Ottkreg is a member of the Imperial Security Bureau, which Tarkin states is a subdivision of the COMPNOR."
  • In the first Bio image's caption, the article capitalizes "Imperial Fleet" but uses "Imperial fleet" in the third Bio paragraph. Which is it?
    • Per our canon article on the Imperial Navy I've changed it to fleet. Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:38, July 6, 2016 (UTC)
  • The Appearances/Sources should always remain consistent with the referencing in use of citation templates. In this case, reference 1 is not correctly utilizing the citation template found in the Appearances.
  • The last sentence in the first Bio subsection is a pretty bad run-on, but I suspect it can be fixed by maybe removing an "and" in there somewhere.
    • Huh someone added the and in a recent copyedit and I missed it. Gone now. Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:38, July 6, 2016 (UTC)
  • Please do address these objections, but this article currently stands at 1144 words, which means it needs to go to FAN. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:22, July 6, 2016 (UTC)

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