Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Electro-dart

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Electro-dart

• Nominated by: Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 09:13, August 6, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: I only have one question. Are you read to ride the lightning?

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. —Tommy 9281 Saturday, August 6, 2011, 11:54 UTC
2. Tranq FTW. ~Savage 15:52, August 6, 2011 (UTC)
3. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:33, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
4. 1358 ^(Talk) 09:55, August 9, 2011 (UTC)
5. CC7567 ^(talk) 23:09, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
6. Talrrivanian ^{(Headquarters)}

Object

Prepare to be savaged…

• Would it be possible to make an article for the battle that knocked HOB out? Or is there simply not anything known about it?
  • Besides the fact that it was between the Republic and Separatists and that HOB served in it, we know nothing. What do you think?
    • Nah, don't worry 'bout it.
• "having walked into the fight" --> Can you maybe reword this? It's unclear if he walks into the sickbay and sees the fight, or if he literally walks in and joins (as in "walked into a punch").
  • Fixed
• Second paragraph of "history" reads a bit PBP. Maybe cut back a bit on some of the detail about who was where when?
  • Cut it down a bit, how's that?
    • I tried to pare it down a bit more, but please be sure I didn't remove anything you think is crucial.
• I'd note the comic's writer and penciler, as they are the ones who essentially created this weapon in canon. Other than these, very, very clean, Kilson. :) ~Savage 14:51, August 6, 2011 (UTC)
  • Added, thanks for the review Bob. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 15:14, August 6, 2011 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• To be honest, I think the end of the History section would benefit with a little more plot info from Salvaged. Maybe just a sentence or something about what happens after HOB-147 was shot the second time, at least about why Coyle was hiding Jedi younglings on his ship? CC7567 ^(talk) 20:05, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
  • Done. Thanks for the review CC. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 23:07, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:00, August 13, 2011 (UTC)