Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Duel on Rhen Var

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Duel on Rhen Var

• Nominated by:—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 00:13, 30 May 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Let's see just how good it is.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. CC7567 ^(talk) 23:17, 2 June 2009 (UTC)
2. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 05:36, 8 June 2009 (UTC)
3. Very nice. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:26, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
4. Grunny ^(Talk) 04:54, 19 June 2009 (UTC)
5. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 05:14, 19 June 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Cloned
   • "However, he quickly realized that she, like he had once done, was allowing her anger to drive her dangerously close acceptance of the dark side of the Force." Please check this sentence; it's unclear whether the "acceptance of" is the direct object of the verb "to drive"; it's not making much sense.
     • Addressed.
   • "the galaxy remained in prolonged a state of recovery": please check; "in prolonged" doesn't seem to be a proper prepositional phrase.
     • Addressed.
   • Looking good otherwise. CC7567 ^(talk) 05:56, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Thank you sir. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 20:07, 2 June 2009 (UTC)
2. From the Council Chambers:
   • "he hired a fervent Jedi-phile spacer": Can we get something other than "Jedi-phile"? It's unclear.
     • Addressed.
   • "Sylvar accepted his offer and made haste for Rhen Var.": "Made haste" is an idiom and therefore colloquial; please replace.
     • I so love that phrase;) Addressed.
   • "Hoggon, who had been secretly watching the contest […] Before he could be stopped, the spacer shot Ulic at point-blank range": It would be extremely difficult—if not impossible—to "secretly watch" something from close enough that you could quickly shoot at "point-blank" range, so please clarify how this is possible.
     • Addressed.
   • "In an interview conducted by Wookieepedia administration,": You may want to reword this per our Avoid self-references guideline—either remove the self-reference altogether or simply provide context on the Wook.
     • Addressed.
   • Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 05:04, 8 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks, MJ. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 05:28, 8 June 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• Might be missing a few sources, I'll add them tonight if so.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 00:13, 30 May 2009 (UTC)
  • Found them all, so far as I know.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 22:47, 31 May 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 05:18, 19 June 2009 (UTC)