Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Drua

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Drua

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Support

  1. Having read the book recently, it seems like everything's here. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:39, June 22, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Always good to see new canon articles! Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:29, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Ecks Dee
  • We don't source the introduction.
    • Oops, leftover from before I added the biography. Removed.Squishy Vic | message 12:06, June 23, 2015 (UTC)
  • Please go through the article and correct any "invisible" formatting inconsistencies:
  • Even though I understand what you mean, your first image caption sounds like it's speculating. Try rewording it (and the prose mention as well) to better emphasize that the village was built by slaves AND refugees, not slaves OR refugees.
  • Please try to cut down on your usage of emdashes. 1358 (Talk) 11:52, June 23, 2015 (UTC)
    • Any particular area and reason? Squishy Vic | message 12:06, June 23, 2015 (UTC)
      • Cut down to only 3 in the whole article, 1 in the intro and 2 in the biography somewhere. Squishy Vic | message 05:13, June 24, 2015 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • In the P&T section you should specify that she looked of an adolescent age at the time of her death or at the time she met Vader or something. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:20, June 27, 2015 (UTC)
Floyd
  • A few prelim objections here:
  • In the "Died" field of the infobox, you should only include a date and location, for instance "32 BBY, Naboo" instead of something like "during an Imperial mission to Ryloth." In this case, since we don't yet have a real generalized dating system for the canon timeline, you'd go with "Five years after the end of the Clone Wars, Ryloth".
  • In the "Affiliation" field, you wouldn't put "Drua's village" if she only lived there, and you only do so very rarely with places instead of organizations in general. You really only fill in that field with factions that the character worked for in any sort of real capacity.
  • Your sourcing in the Behind the scenes section is rather odd. You should cite the whole thing just to Lords of the Sith, and you furthermore don't need to specify that the novel is new canon. You really don't need to cite the StarWars.com article to anything. IFYLOFD (Talk) 02:30, August 1, 2015 (UTC)
Manoof
  • You have an article for her mother, but not for her father, both of which were mentioned in passing. If one gets an article, so should the other, as minor mentions as they are. Manoof (talk) 06:04, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the intro, you mention mining shelter, but mining tunnels in the bio. I assume you mean mining tunnels for shelter, but you need to clarify that. Manoof (talk) 06:04, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • "by Twi'leks that had once been escaped mining slaves and may have been refugees..." Is this use of "may" yours or the sources? Additionally, were these twileks slaves AND refugees, or were there both refugee and slave twileks? Manoof (talk) 06:04, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • In the P&T, would ignorance be more accurate than naivety (regarding her behaviour to the imperials) Manoof (talk) 06:04, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • I don't think mentioning her lekku in the P&T is necessary, as that is characteristic of her species. Manoof (talk) 06:04, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • Could you rephrase the first sentence of the equipment section, perhaps to "... wind of Ryloth, and carried a backpack containing her gear and lylek tube, a wooden sound instrument used to keep lyleks away." At the moment there are too many "and"s in close proximity. Manoof (talk) 06:04, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • The image of ryloth you used has clone wars-era ships visible. Could you use another image (perhaps File:Ryloth Ghost Raid) which doesn't have anything extra in the foreground? Manoof (talk) 06:04, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • Any way to shorten the caption in the second image to one sentence? Something like "Drua and the other villagers met their end at the hands of Sidious and Vader" or something similar. Great little article, I may have to get the book! Manoof (talk) 06:04, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
  • You also need to mention she is female in the P&T Manoof (talk) 06:07, August 5, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Unaddressed objections past two weeks. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:34, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:35, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 00:35, August 16, 2015 (UTC)