- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Drokko Kira
- Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 05:57, January 3, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: In Okinawa, all Miyagi know two things: fish and karate.
(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
- Nayayen—TALK 13:39, January 18, 2010 (UTC)
—Tommy9281 
(Mechno-chair) 07:17, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:55, January 26, 2010 (UTC)
CC7567 (talk) 20:33, January 31, 2010 (UTC)- Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 21:09, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
Object
- Nayayen-san
There are quite a few instances of a comma just before an "and" which, if I'm correct, is grammatically incorrect. I fixed some that I was certain about but I didn't do all of them for lack of wanting to mess things up.- Addressed.
"Kira became locked in a sort of stupor" A sort of stupor? Eh? Can you be a little less vague?- Addressed.
- You sourced it to the actual issues this time! :P Nayayen—TALK 22:53, January 15, 2010 (UTC)
- Blacklist:
Drokko became a member of the Republic with the rest of the Beast Riders after the Battle of Iziz, so the appropriate infobox should be used since he was no longer a criminal.- Addressed.
"For this, he was banished from Iziz, sustaining an unhealing wound in the process." Who was banished from Iziz? Freedon Nadd?- Addressed.
Why didn't he speak again for 50 years? If it was because of the unhealthy wound he suffered, that needs to be specified.- The two are not actually linked in the source material. It just says he has not spoken in 50 years.
"That scenario ended up occurring..." Surely you can do better.- Addressed.
"Suddenly, a fire not seen in fifty years flamed into Drokko Kira's eyes..." Flowery prose.- Addressed.
That's all.—Tommy9281 (Mechno-chair) 00:03, January 16, 2010 (UTC)Missing sources. This problem is getting old.—Tommy9281 (Mechno-chair) 05:50, January 18, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:09, January 31, 2010 (UTC)