Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Doorn

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Doorn

• Nominated by: Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 04:02, July 28, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: For WP:TOR Cynical and burned out seems to be common trend with these guys during the Cold War

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. I support! 501st dogma^(talk) 17:54, August 12, 2012 (UTC)
2. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 08:49, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
3. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 19:21, September 9, 2012 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 19:51, September 26, 2012 (UTC)
5. Oh July.. Winterz (talk) 18:43, October 6, 2012 (UTC)

Object

I object!

• "Though he had once been proud of both his job and his rank, he longer did so." What's this supposed to say? ...he no longer did so?
  • Yeah something like that. :P Fixed.
• Article for Coruscant's secret tunnels?
  • Done.
• The intro has "The assignment was difficult with constant street warfare against the Black Sun crime syndicate." Could that be placed in the bio too?
  • Done.
• Context on Justicar's Brigade
  • Done.
• Good work otherwise. 501st dogma^(talk) 15:54, August 12, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks. Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 16:19, August 12, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

The intro and the bio don't quite mesh. The intro says he was working with Fieler Dan and then contracted the Republic individual for help. The bio says he contracting the Republic individual to Dan. The order of events needs to be consistent. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:18, August 16, 2012 (UTC)

• Done. Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 20:23, August 20, 2012 (UTC)
  • Better, but I think the order of events in the bio needs to be reworked chronologically. Doorn's working with Dan should be mentioned before the Republic individual is mentioned as it occurred prior to the meeting. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 23:08, August 26, 2012 (UTC)
    • Done. Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 02:48, August 28, 2012 (UTC)

Floyd

• "Around 3,643 BBY, plans of secret tunnels underneath Coruscant which had been stolen by the vigilante Justicars' Brigade militia." Not a coherent sentence, please fix.
  • Done.
• Article for Dan's daughter?
  • Done.
• You explain why Dan wants copies made of the plan twice, which is redundant and unnecessary.
  • Done. Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 18:45, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
• Nice work. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:58, September 5, 2012 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• Something to keep in mind in the future: brown and blue are disambiguation pages and should not be linked to in any IU parts of the article. Color needs to be linked instead. Please rectify.
  • Done.
    • Please take another look at your change for this objection. CC7567 ^(talk) 14:05, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
      • Wow that was embarrassing. Fixed.
• Not an objection, but a note: "BG1" and "BG2" fields only appear in the general {{Character infobox}}, not any of the specialized infoboxes like the one used here.
  • Got it.
• Some time marker should be given at the beginning of the P&T, i.e. "By the time of the Cold War," as the chronology is otherwise ambiguous.
  • Done.
    • Time needs to be linked. CC7567 ^(talk) 14:05, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
      • Done. Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 04:25, September 26, 2012 (UTC)
• Specifically, which in-game character is represented by the Republic character class? This should be linked in the article. CC7567 ^(talk) 17:14, September 14, 2012 (UTC)
  • In this case the mission can be taken on by any of the four Republic character so for those kinds of TOR articles we simply refer to "Republic individual", "Republic hero", "Republic person", etc. since from canon there is no one specific person to complete the mission. If that makes sense? Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 00:37, September 20, 2012 (UTC)
    • That's fine. CC7567 ^(talk) 14:05, September 21, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:18, October 6, 2012 (UTC)