Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Domain Kraal

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Domain Kraal

• Nominated by: 501st dogma^(talk) 21:42, August 23, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: It's amazing how fun it is to write an article in a day after having done the Far Orbit

(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 23:42, September 3, 2013 (UTC)
2. CC7567 ^(talk) 20:17, September 21, 2013 (UTC)
3. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 07:55, October 21, 2013 (UTC)
4. Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 21:58, October 21, 2013 (UTC)
5. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:01, October 29, 2013 (UTC)
6. Winterz (talk) 15:44, October 29, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd

• Infobox redlink.
  • Killed the typo that made it a redlink.
• Link for Domain Kraal's base on Borleias? IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 00:16, September 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Pow. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:12, September 3, 2013 (UTC)

Cav

• old New Republic/Imperial one after destroying it. - pretty sure the base has a name. Alderaan Biotics facility I believe.
  • The biotics building is a different structure on Borleais. I can create an article for the other base though, if you wish. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:26, September 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Ah, yes. An article would be appropriate if we do not have one already.
      • Pow, there you go. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:12, September 23, 2013 (UTC)
• In 27 ABY, following the fall of the New Republic capital - name, please\
  • Blarg, must of missed typing that. There.
• relay some information regarding the enemy's position to their superiors - which superiors? Domain Kraal was defeated.
  • Clarified.
• The use of "Kraals" and "Chas" strikes me as wrong usage. Does the book ever refer to them this way? Given that "Yuuzhan Vong" is explicitly used over "Vong" by the invaders, it would seem that "Domain Kraal" and "Domain Cha" is the prefered way to refer to the Domains. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 08:06, September 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • The author uses Kraals once in the book, so I saw fit to use it here. As for Chas, its never used, but I don't have it in the article. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:26, September 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • Fair enough, but bear in mind that if you find precedent in other works to change it as needed. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 20:50, September 23, 2013 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• Minor, but please find a substitute for one of the usages of "fought under" in the last History paragraph.
  • Done.
• Is Warmaster a title that is always capitalized? If not, it needs to be decapitalized when it refers to an individual per the new rule. CC7567 ^(talk) 05:06, September 21, 2013 (UTC)
  • There, fixed. Thanks for the review. 501st dogma^(talk) 13:05, September 21, 2013 (UTC)

Winterz

• Don't know if it's just me but "The Domain was answerable to the Yuuzhan Vong's warmaster," sounds a bit weird. I wonder, could you reword it? Winterz (talk) 16:09, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
  • How is that? 501st dogma^(talk) 21:04, October 15, 2013 (UTC)

Slap my kneebones to the ground

• "Domain Kraal was present for the Yuuzhan Vong's invasion of a galaxy other than their own, and after the invaders captured the world of Borleias from the New Republic, Domian Kraal was given control of the planet as a colony." - Can we just call it "the domain" to break it up for variety's sake? Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 04:55, October 21, 2013 (UTC)
  • There you go. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:14, October 21, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:43, October 29, 2013 (UTC)