Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Dolandu

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Dolandu

  • Nominated by: --Eyrezer 03:03, 6 July 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: D is for Dolandu

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Everything looks good! ~ SavageBob 23:38, 6 July 2009 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 03:02, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
  3. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 12:16, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
  4. —Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 19:13, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
  5. Very good. Andykatib 21:30, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
  6. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 06:17, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
  7. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:12, 28 July 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. Just a few.
    • "The residents of Stomorr were attacked by forces under the control of some Dark Jedi who sought to kill the Jedi Master Niquon" - "Some" Dark Jedi is a little colloquial, and doesn't flow so well; could this be changed, please?
      • Changed a little. Unfortunately, the Dark Jedi are never seen on Skolokor and their numbers never specified.
    • "a colorful and cozy trading center" - Is that stated in the source? I'm afraid I'm not familiar with it but, if not, cozy's POV and colloquial.
      • Colorful and cozy is how the source describes it.
    • "with flagstone paved streets and some statues." - Same as objection one.
      • Done.
    • Could the second reference idea perhaps be placed in the BtS instead?
      • Done.
    • Otherwise, good work. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 12:38, 6 July 2009 (UTC)
  2. The Grand Master
    • Intro: Why did they want to kill Niquon? Also, I assume Niquon was one of the Jedi who lived near the settlement, but could this be clarified?
      • Because they were Dark Jedi? :P There is no motivation given for why they want to kill him. Changed the intro around for the second bit.
    • History: "...it was capable of injecting lethal poison." Into what/whom? Did the droid already do this, because the next sentence makes it seem so. This is rather vague.
      • Yeah, the source is pretty vague. All the info provided can be seen in the quote at the start of that section.
    • By "droid fighers", do you mean a form of battle droid? Because if so, it should link to that article.
      • I added the link. I hadn't done so because it evokes the Trade Fed droids for me.
    • Shouldn't the alternate paths be noted in the BTS?
      • Done
    • Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 01:22, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
      • Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 02:49, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
  3. Please check the "which was settled by Humans and various"; it doesn't sound clear. It's normally "Humans settled on <place>", but if there's a reason for this, please explain. CC7567 (talk) 00:18, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
    • It seems fine to me. "New Zealand was settled by the British"... Yabosta was settled by Humans... --Eyrezer 04:46, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
  4. Toprawa:
    • Please see that the article's sectioning adheres to the LG. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:10, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
      • Done. --Eyrezer 04:46, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
    • This might be a bit nitpicky, but "cozy" is kind of coming off as POV to me. Can we choose a different a term? "a colorful and cozy trading center"
      • This is one of those straight from the source adjectives. I could change it to something like "a colorful and comfortable trading center" if need be. I can't really think of another way to put it.
    • What hill is this? This sentence becomes rather narrative, and I'm not sure what this is referring to exactly. Would "down the mountain" be better? "Niquon ventured down the hill with Borta"
      • Changed it up a bit
    • The article categorizes the species as mammalian. Is there any real canonical proof to suggest this? Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:00, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
      • Just based on their furry-ness. Can be removed if you feel it's appropriate. --Eyrezer 11:52, 27 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:12, 28 July 2009 (UTC)