Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Dician

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Dician

Nominated by: Grunny ^(Talk) 05:16, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Another Legacy Sith

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

Dician's hot.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 02:55, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
Yet another well-written article. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 11:22, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
Cylka^-talk- 14:25, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
Looks great. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 02:07, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
DC 05:23, 18 February 2009 (UTC)

Object

I think the P&A is very unnecessary, and probably detracts from the article more than it adds to it. I'd suggest just merging it with the P&T. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 20:10, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
- Merged :-). Grunny ^(Talk) 00:53, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
Tommy:
- ~~You call both Korriban and Ziost the Sith homeworld. Which is it?~~
  - Korriban current homeworld; Ziost original homeworld. Hopefuly explained now :).
- ~~You have many instances of Alema Rar. After the first mention, it should just be "Rar".~~
  - Done. Grunny ^(Talk) 02:50, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
- I've contemplated Dician from time to time, and you've done a nice job with her.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 02:20, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
  - Thanks, Tommy :-). Grunny ^(Talk) 02:50, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
    - My pleasure.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 02:55, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
Soresu
- ~~Sub-section the biography.~~
  - How's that?
- continue as ordered but to prepare their weapons be ready to make fast run from the final asteroid to their target. Reword. That makes no sense whatsoever. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 05:51, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
  - Few missing words :S. How's it looking now? :) Grunny ^(Talk) 06:36, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
- ~~Where was it identified as being the same order as the One Sith? Might need a source for that.~~SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 05:58, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
  - Sourced. Thanks for reviewing, Soresu :-). Grunny ^(Talk) 06:36, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
~~I believe that for the length of the article, the intro is too long and contains too much detail. Please cut it down some. DC 02:27, 8 February 2009 (UTC)~~
- I tried cutting a lot of detail out without losing the general information. How's it looking now? Let me know if you want to see more :-). Grunny ^(Talk) 10:21, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
  - Cut it down a bit more, and combine the paragraphs so it looks better. DC 02:45, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
    - How's that? :-) Grunny ^(Talk) 03:51, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
      - Better, by loads. DC 04:19, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
Cylka:
- You mention how Dician met with the Sith Lords to convince them to commit resources to locate Rar, but it's only a bit later that you explain why. Maybe when you first introduce this statement you could add in something to the effect that she had valuable assets or somesuch.
  - How's that?
- She also considered the possibility that Jedi and traitor to the noble Sith name of Skywalker, Leia Organa Solo... - This sounds a bit POVish. If this was Dician's opinion, please make that clear.
  - Done :).
- Was Dician supposed to destroy the whole asteroid or only the asteroid base? Dician ordered the detonation of the charges to ensure the destruction of the asteroid and Rar.. - This sentence makes it a bit unclear. If you could clarify that, please.
  - Done.
- Another good one, Grunnny. :-) Cylka^-talk- 05:13, 14 February 2009 (UTC)
  - Thanks for the review Cylka :-). Grunny ^(Talk) 08:59, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
DC
- ~~Didn't the Sith give Alema Vectivus' holocron to mock Jacen, as well as to track her? If so, add out of context.~~
  - Done.
- "The white-eyed man who led the conclave" It's ambiguous right now to say that White Eyes led the conclave of Sith, I'm pretty sure it hasn't been confirmed, due to this fellow.
  - Reworded it to say "appeared to lead the conclave".
- "Dician told her crew to make no mistakes, telling them that they would be perfect; they would continue their approach, make a run on the Falcon, and destroy the asteroid base, and they would do it perfectly." Run-on, doesn't make sense.
  - Addressed.
- ~~You mention the second odd occurrence, then talk about the first later in the sentence. Use the first and second odd occurrences chronologically to avoid confusion.~~
  - How's that? :)
    - Resolved per IRC discussion with Grunny.
- ~~In the bio, why does Dician expect perfection? You're a bit hazy on this, especially at the end of the paragraph when you keep on reminding the reader that Dician expected perfection.~~
  - Done.
    - Resolved per IRC discussion with Grunny.
- ~~Please source to the exact issue from Broken in which it states the One Sith's tradition of implanting Sith tattoos.~~
  - Done.
- Nice job. DC 14:18, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
  - Thanks, DC :-). Grunny ^(Talk) 14:47, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
    - For the objections that I haven't struck, I'd like to talk it over with you on IRC. DC 19:38, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
Toprawa:
- ~~No P/A?~~ Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:29, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
  - I originally had a P/A, but Acky in his objection above advised me to merge it into the P/T as it was quite short. Would you prefer I re-create it? Grunny ^(Talk) 03:11, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
    - If it's only one sentence, not necessary. But can you expand on that at all to make it section-worthy? Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:49, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
      - How's that? :) Grunny ^(Talk) 02:27, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
        Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:25, 20 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:25, 20 February 2009 (UTC)