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Devidia Vennsiol

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:32, August 10, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Another lucrative bounty for any roleplayers out there.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote She sounds like a wonderful person. Winterz (talk) 16:05, September 7, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:24, September 23, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 13:49, September 23, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:04, October 6, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:28, October 7, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • .Initial objection; you use first names throughout. Please replace with surnames as per the MOS and LG. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 08:12, August 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • I think an article for the blaster pistol prototypes themselves are warranted. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:13, August 19, 2013 (UTC)
    • It's not made clear if the pistols are all one type of protoype or a number of different prototypes for different designs. I feel like an article for them would be a bit of a group article which I thought we generally avoided? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:30, September 5, 2013 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • The last sentence of the P&T section should probably be rewritten, it seems a little awkward.
  • The article in the magazine doesn't say that Dorbus Kyrullus was a boy, he could have been older.
    • Changed to a less specific turn. Ayrehead02 (talk) 01:16, August 14, 2013 (UTC)
  • I think that you can get some more information from the RPG statistics from the article.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 00:38, August 14, 2013 (UTC)
    • Added that she was particularly dexterous since she has a score of sixteen. Do I also need to add in stuff from her skills? Ayrehead02 (talk) 01:16, August 14, 2013 (UTC)
      • I believe it is common practice to determine a character's in-universe skills from the RPG skills.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 13:46, August 16, 2013 (UTC)
        • Ok added in all the skills she has listed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:02, August 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • It seems to me that the information about her hair and tattoos would fit better in the personality and traits section than in the equipment section.
  • Please change the {{1st}} tag to a {{1stm}} tag, sources cannot have a 1st appearance tag.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 13:46, August 16, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you break up the third sentence of the intro?
  • I noticed quite a few grammatical and stylistic mistakes in the article. Here are my changes for future reference.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 04:26, August 19, 2013 (UTC)
    • Thanks I'll make sure to add more commas in future. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:47, August 19, 2013 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Please reload the infobox. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:21, September 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • The word "laboratory" is misspelled in the Biography quote. Does the source actually spell it like that?
  • Judging from her infobox picture, I believe the Equipment section can also mention a utility belt and dual holsters. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:41, October 5, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:17, October 7, 2013 (UTC)