Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Dendro

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Dendro

  • Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:19, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another Jedi killed by Vader…

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Pre-nom reviewed. —Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 19:06, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Clone Commander Lee Talk 19:31, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
  3. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 02:20, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Good work. -- 1358 (Talk) 18:49, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:29, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:13, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
  7. ACvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:11, May 21, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. Lee attacks...after Order 66. Hm, did I execute that Order?
    • Possible a mention that his master was a Ovoni in the intro.
    • Is "Jedi Master" really needed after his master's name in the infobox ?
      • This is common practice, from what I've seen.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
    • The first two sentences of the second paragraph of the bio are a little choppy. Merge please.
      • You sure? Those are two large sentences.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
    • the Sith Lord used the Force to push the Padawan to push him back, forward ?
    • Did Vader stabbed/beheaded etc. Dendro ?
    • Otherwise nice work. Hope you find time for his master. And we had the discussion about the lightsaber colour so I won't object it. Always happy to review your articles. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:07, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
      • Thanks for the review, Lee, happy to receive them. Yes, I am working on Hylon, actually.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Soresu
    • Dendro, a Human male, served the Jedi Order as a Padawan during the Clone Wars. During this time, he came under the tutelage of the Ovoni Jedi Master Hylon. You're basically saying that during his time as a padawan, he came under the tutelage of the Ovoni Jedi Master Hylon. The problem with that is that you don't become a Padawan until you have a Master. Maybe you should just say he served the order and move the padawan bit into the next sentence.
    • Vader grasped Dendro by his neck and removed his hood, recognizing that Dendro was a Padawan. Is it said how he knew? Did he recognize him personally, or notice a padawan braid? SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 02:54, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
      • Please try it. Thanks for the review, Soresu. --Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:43, May 14, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

The sources of the quotes say that all quotes are from Seconds to die, but there is only The Hidden Blade in the source-list. Is it a mistake or not? Nahdar Vebb 08:43, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
Don't know how I made this mistake, fixed. Thanks for pointing that out.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:49, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
No problem. I thought: I've Seconds to Die, but why I don't know him? This must be a mistake. 19:41, May 14, 2010 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:11, May 21, 2010 (UTC)