Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Dav Taffral

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Dav Taffral

  • Nominated by: User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 22:15, August 7, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Aftermath was such a good novel.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 16:26, August 9, 2019 (UTC)
  2. Fan26 (Talk) 11:26, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
  3. ACvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 19:55, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:00, August 20, 2019 (UTC)
  5. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 01:21, August 20, 2019 (UTC)

Object

Naru
  • If the incident with his father and brother is the only thing that happened to him in the novel, then it (and, particularly, his father) should be mentioned in the introduction. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 15:51, August 8, 2019 (UTC)
    • Amended.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 00:34, August 9, 2019 (UTC)
Fan
  • Based on the dialogue, I think you could mention the speeder bike was stored in their barn. Fan26 (Talk) 20:08, August 8, 2019 (UTC)
    • Added.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 00:34, August 9, 2019 (UTC)
Anil
  • I think you could slightly expand the intro. It looks small compared to the rest of the article.
    • Does that work?User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:03, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • (Not an objection) Please use … (view in the source editor mode) instead of ... for three dots in your future edits.
  • (Not an objection) The quotes looked too long for me, so I've removed some bits and piece without changing their purpose/meaning in the article. I've also added another one for Personality and traits. Please feel free to change them however you like. After you are done with them, I'll upload accompanying audio files.
    • Thanks^^ They seem good to me, so I'll be leaving them as is.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:03, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • As far as I see in the novel, they don't see the TIE fighters, just hear their voice. So we don't know what model TIEs they were. Therefore, I'd suggest pipelinking TIE fighter to TIE fighter series and Starfighter instead of TIE/ln space superiority starfighter.
    • Done.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:03, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • In the biography, I think you should present Dav's family members in the first paragraph, instead of introducing them after Dav's return to home.
    • Got that.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:03, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • Personality and traits can be expanded, such as adding Dav's believing the New Republic wouldn't be corrupted in the future.
    • Does that work?User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:03, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • Which reminds me, doesn't that section of the novel take place after the reorganization of the Rebellion into the New Republic? So, isn't it fair to assume that Dav is a member of the Republic?
    • Fair point, amended.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:03, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • The most of the new canon media don't capitalize the adjective "rebel," which is also the de facto rule we have adopted in canon articles. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:27, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
    • Tweaked.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:03, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • "Figured myself a single man, a simple farmer, until your mother came along—may all the stars welcome her soul." I think this line implies that Dav's mother died sometime before Dav's return to Saleucami. Also, you could briefly mention that Dav's father was a farmer.
    • Tweaked that into it.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 19:32, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • I think there is room for at least one image in the article. As there is no available image of him or his relatives, I'd suggest using something kinda related, like File:New_Republic_canon.svg with a caption stating Dav's affiliation to the Rebel Alliance/New Republic, or an image of Saleucami with a caption about Dav's return. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:40, August 19, 2019 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I'm going to recommend the removal of the body image. It doesn't add any illustrative significance to the article subject. I'm not a fan of putting images into articles just to put images into articles. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:51, August 20, 2019 (UTC)
    • Taken out.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 00:59, August 20, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:21, August 20, 2019 (UTC)