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Dar Keyis
- Nominated by: Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 14:13, 16 January 2009 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Cav's back on the GA page, and he's brought a non-DarkStryder nom with him!
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:00, 16 January 2009 (UTC)- Graestan(Talk) 19:50, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 22:43, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
- Pranay Sobusk ~ Talk 16:28, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:27, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
Object
You should mention that he Rogue Ten somewhere in the bio. I don't think succession boxes should convey new info.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 04:48, 17 January 2009 (UTC)- Done.
- Graestan the Merciless:
Ditto Soresu, and I'd say in the intro, as well.- Done.
A little more context for the campaign and missions in the intro, please.- Added.
Context for the campaign in the bio, as well. Vuultin isn't initially described as a city on Brentaal IV, even.- Added some.
Some explanation on the presence of Independence—the mention of it and Ackbar is a bit out of the blue.- Mentioned Ackbar earlier in the article, provided context for Independence.
Even with the "as evidenced" part, "an excellent pilot" on its own is POVish.- Reworded.
Describe his mention in Family Ties in the BtS.- Done.
File:Dar keyis.jpg has visible comic frame that needs to be cropped out.- I've asked Redemption for a rescan of the image; I tried myself, but I couldn't get the qaulity right.
- No need for a re-scan, per se; only that you reupload the image, having cut off that sliver at the bottom. Graestan(Talk) 03:02, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
- Should be good now. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 10:41, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
- Should be good now. - Cavalier One
- No need for a re-scan, per se; only that you reupload the image, having cut off that sliver at the bottom. Graestan(Talk) 03:02, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
- I've asked Redemption for a rescan of the image; I tried myself, but I couldn't get the qaulity right.
- Graestan(Talk) 17:56, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
Nothing big, but if he was first a pilot of the New Republic Starfighter Corps, couldn't that also be included in the infobox under affiliation?- Added.
Staging from Recopia, ... Could you clarify what Recopia is?Otherwise, good article. Pranay Sobusk ~ Talk 10:19, 1 February 2009 (UTC)- Added context on what Recopia is. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 10:30, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
- Added context on what Recopia is. - Cavalier One
- Toprawa:
The last paragraph of the biography is begging for closure. What happened in the battle? Did the NR succeed in stopping the escapees?- Added battle conclusion.
I find it interesting that the BTS capitalizes the "Roll of the Dead" as a proper noun. Should we not be redlinking to this in the biography upon mention of the death roster?- I must have been tripping here. Its referred to as the "roster of the dead". Unfortunately, since all comic lettering is capitalized, I can't say for certain if it's meant to be a proper noun or not. Decapitalized and changed. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 09:02, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
- I must have been tripping here. Its referred to as the "roster of the dead". Unfortunately, since all comic lettering is capitalized, I can't say for certain if it's meant to be a proper noun or not. Decapitalized and changed. - Cavalier One
Also, I added "Eventually" to Tarrin Datch's field in the succ box, since nothing states direct succession. Please do the same to Fel if appropriate.- No need. Fel joined the squadron directly after.
I'm willing to bet there's an entry in SWE and/or CSWE. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:00, 2 February 2009 (UTC)- How much you willing to bet? No individual entry for the character in either, and no reference under Brentaal, or Rogue Squadron. If he's in there, its a brief mention in another entry that I haven't found. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 09:02, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
- Not that much. :P Thanks for checking. Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:27, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
- How much you willing to bet? No individual entry for the character in either, and no reference under Brentaal, or Rogue Squadron. If he's in there, its a brief mention in another entry that I haven't found. - Cavalier One
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:27, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
Two things:
- Internal links the Battle of Brentaal IV article are a little off at the moment, but will align themselves once I post my rewrite of that article in a day or two.
- The references are screwed up - please see Forum:CT:Amending the Manual of Style to counter a problem with reference tag sourcing for the reason. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 14:13, 16 January 2009 (UTC)