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Crys

  • Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:55, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Got to do the clone who is the image of my userpage...

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:06, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
  2. JangFett (Talk) 03:07, July 24, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:08, July 29, 2011 (UTC)
  4. I like Crys, nice to see he's in GA shape.--Talrrivanian JaingHead (Headquarters) 07:41, July 29, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Kilson(Let's have a chat) 18:59, July 29, 2011 (UTC)

Object

  • Have you checked all TCW material—New Battlefronts, Official Episode Guide Series 1 & 2, even existing or upcoming Hasbro sets—for mentions of him? Even the UK comics? (Though they probably don't have anything, it's best to check.) CC7567 (talk) 02:42, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
    • Checked the "New Battlefronts" and did not even considered it that there could be some info about him in there. For the Guide I simply did not know that this book existed when I wrote this article. My apologies for that stupid error, it wasn't the first time I did such a bad searching. May I acquire your help on your talk page? Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:42, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
      • And The Deserter dataclip? JangFett (Talk) 18:22, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
        • What dataclip? Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:30, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
          • On cartoon Network, all episodes that aired received a dataclip that has various facts about certain things that appeared in the episode. [1] JangFett (Talk) 18:33, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
            • Only available in the US. That's discrimination of non-Americans. Can everyone please check this source? Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:43, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
              • I checked. He's there, but there's no new information. JangFett (Talk) 18:56, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
                • Thanks a lot, man. Clone Commander Lee Talk 19:00, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
                  • While there's no info from the UK comics or the Official Episode Guide, please do ask next time prior to nominating an article. CC7567 (talk) 20:28, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
Jangles
  • I basically rewrote much of the intro; please see what I corrected.
  • In the second sentence of the biography could focus more on Crys' poi instead of explaining events that occurred an episode before The Deserter. You can give information of what had occurred, but straight-to-the-point. Focus more on Crys, and him joining Kenobi, ect.
    • Done. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:17, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
      • Where in Grievous Intrigue is Crys or is it even mentioned elsewhere. I don't remember any of this, and you currently sourced it to the Intrigue episode. Again, without exaggerating, you can briefly explain what occurred in Saleucami space, then talk about Crys joined Kenobi, ect.
        • Adressed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:50, June 28, 2011 (UTC)
          • Again, and this relates to the sentence below, you need to be a little more clear when you're saying Grievous escaped to the planet. Obviously he escaped on an escape pod, and that all connects with later sentences in the article.
  • If Crys wasn't directly involved with the scouting of the shuttle, and per my knowledge he wasn't, it would be best to leave any of that information out, including the "spilting of the teams." What you can do is say they scouted the shuttle, and Crys and Cody conducted the robolobotomy, ect.
  • I think in both the intro and bio, you could clarify that Grievous was in a pod that crashed, and he wanted to find the other pod that descended on the planet's surface
    • Adressed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:17, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
      • Not quite, not it's a little more confusing. In the bio, you said that they went to search for Grievous' landing craft, but then he was in an escape pod?
        • Better? Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:50, June 28, 2011 (UTC)
          • Still remains; like above, this needs clarifying.
            • Intro is taken care of, now the bio still remains.
  • "Crys was able to perform a robolotomy, and successfully used this ability on Saleucami."
  • "When asked by Kenobi, he gave the Jedi a short and useful report." I think you can merge these two P&T sentences together and explain what Crys did, and gave the information to Kenobi. As it stands, these two sentences make no sense next to each other.
    • Merged. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:03, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
      • "Crys was able to perform a robolotomy, and successfully used this ability on Saleucami and following this, he gave Kenobi a short and useful report." This entire sentence as it stands makes no sense. He was able to perform a robolotomy, fine. However, the rest of the sentence is very difficult to understand. It reads like he was testing his skills and telling Kenobi of it, which is not true. Please go back and fix this.
        • Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:50, June 28, 2011 (UTC)
          • Sorry, I should have been a little more clear. What did he preform the robolotomy on?
  • "Like all clone troopers, Crys stood 1.83 meters tall and had brown eyes. He also decided to dye his originally black hair" So you're suggesting that all clone troopers are the same height? This is incorrect. As for the second, where did Crys decide this? It certainly wasn't mentioned in the episode, nor was it in AOTC.
    • Both adressed.
      • You don't have to say he's 1.83 meters tall, brown eyes, when those are traits of the majority of clone troopers. If it's unique in a way, like red eyes, then it would be suitable to mention this in a P&T. The only thing that can be mentioned is he dyed his hair blond.
  • I corrected multiple mistakes in this article. In the future, Lee, I would advice you to concentrate on your current nominations rather than starting new ones. We've gone through this before, and I do remember former discussions of it. I have learned that concentrating on your current nominations can help your writing a lot, as you are able to find and correct mistakes better than you previously did. Nominating nomination after nomination won't help you at all if you're struggling to fix certain spelling or grammatical mistakes, which, however, can appear quite frequently if you're just nominating articles without paying any mind to them. Seeing the same mistakes over and over again in your articles, Lee, is not acceptable, and you should be able to catch the mistakes yourself. I'll end my rant here to not derail this nomination, but keep this in mind in the future. JangFett (Talk) 04:13, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
    • While I agree that I should slow down my nomination process, I do not agree to your "assumption" that I don't pay any mind to these articles. Actually I took my time before nominating him, but nevertheless the number of nominations will be fewer in the future to avoid these problems. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:17, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
      • For some reason, I don't know if you did give this a good look prior to nomination. And it was not only the grammatical side of it, but your information within the article as well. JangFett (Talk) 15:24, June 28, 2011 (UTC)
  • Like I told TK in his TCW nom, you can find images of Crys without having to find images that are related to the text. JangFett (Talk) 15:24, June 28, 2011 (UTC)
    • Eh, I do not understand what you mean. Could you make this statement any clearer? Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:50, June 28, 2011 (UTC)
      • Find more images of Crys. JangFett (Talk) 14:20, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
        • I hope those objections above are fine to you. However, I'm not able to upload a better image of Crys, so I deliberately took that one. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:49, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
  • Sorry about this, Lee, but you can list his height, eye color in his P&T. JangFett (Talk) 18:55, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
    • Re-added. I tried everything to adress the objections above, but can you say what is not clear. That Greivous escaped per pod? Or that he found the other pod? Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:59, July 1, 2011 (UTC)
      • It is unclear what Grievous used to land on the planet. Please take a look at the objections above as well. JangFett (Talk) 16:21, July 2, 2011 (UTC)
  • For the General's way to the planet (First craft, then crashed pod), I hope it is better now. Is there still a problem in the P&T? Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:06, July 3, 2011 (UTC)
    • Lee, please make comments below each objection. I do see your nomination, but I don't know whether or not you've addressed the objections. As for the objections, there's still an issue with the shuttle mentioning in the bio. JangFett (Talk) 22:41, July 22, 2011 (UTC)
Cav
  • Switch the mentions of the Republic searching for the escape pod and Grievous crashing to keep them in chronological order.
    • Adressed.
  • The General meanwhile, had crashed with his escape pod. Redundant wording - he was in the escape pod, so of course he crashed with it. Please reword.
    • Done.
  • The Republic forces soon found the landing craft, and also an intact, albeit deactivated, B1 battle droid and Kenobi ordered to load the droid onboard an AT-TE walker, so his team could later preform a robolobotomy on it. Run on sentence. Please break up and reword last part to adjust spelling/ grammar errors.
    • Splitted.
  • On the whole, this article was rife with spelling errors, missing words, and grammatical errors. I've got several of them, but you should go over it again yourself. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:49, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
    • I'm sorry for the poor quality of the article. Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:41, July 16, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Please reload the infobox. New parameters have been added to the infobox code since this nomination began. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:50, July 26, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson
  • Fill in the Skin field of the Infobox. I believe you could use "Tan" or something of that nature. Also, remember to place that info in the P&t. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 14:28, July 28, 2011 (UTC)
    • Added the info in the infobox and in the P&T. Thanks for the review and the good catch. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:01, July 28, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:59, July 29, 2011 (UTC)


  1. I'm away from July 10 till July 15 and unable to adress any objections in this time. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:15, July 9, 2011 (UTC)