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Covallon
- Nominated by: --Eyrezer 00:20, March 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 11:36, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 22:01, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
- Seriously, they're sentients. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:13, March 17, 2010 (UTC)
Assuming Tope's objection is addressed. Jonjedigrandmaster (We seed the stars) 20:43, March 19, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:12, March 20, 2010 (UTC)
Object
- Cav
Covallon society developed to an early information technology level by the time of the Galactic Civil War, although most Covallon were comfortable with technology. Something about this sentence doesn't quite work; they had an information technology level society, so why wouldn't they be comfortable around technology?While I am all for not "dumbing down" articles, the use of the word "antecedents" seems a little off when "ancestors" could be used instead. Although technically correct, ancestors would seem more fitting in this instance.- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 16:49, March 14, 2010 (UTC)
- The implication in the source is that an "early information technology" is quite primitive by galactic standards, but that Covallon are also compfortable with more advanced technology. I've added a bit to hopefully make this clearer. And made the change to your second objection, too. --Eyrezer 04:08, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
- Skippy. Alien species. Of course
Intro: I cannot see the use of the semi-colon, but maybe it's just me.- But I like semi-colons! :P
- Okey, it must be just me.
- But I like semi-colons! :P
In the galaxy: About the part about Luke Skywalker trying to supervise the arrest of the Moff. Is it really relevant? I mean, maybe it is for the article on vuv Tertarrnek, but not for this one.- Are you suggesting cutting just the last sentence? Or more? If just the last, I'd be fine with that.
- I'll be fine if the last sentence is cut.
- The scissors have been out. --Eyrezer 18:43, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
- I'll be fine if the last sentence is cut.
- Are you suggesting cutting just the last sentence? Or more? If just the last, I'd be fine with that.
Maybe you could describe the naming convention used by this species? A name with a lowercase particle is exceptional, not to mention the æ.- Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:25, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
- How about this? --Eyrezer 18:02, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
- Soresu
Make sure everything is in past tense.Covallon society developed to an early information technology level by the time of the Galactic Civil War, although most Covallon were comfortable with technology. You need to specify what type of tech (I would assume modern) in the second case.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 03:58, March 16, 2010 (UTC)- Should both be addressed now. With the first one, I found one 'has' that should have been a 'had'. Please feel free to make such changes yourself if you see them in my noms. --Eyrezer 18:43, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
- Toprawa:
I'm thinking it would be best to designate an "unidentified" article for the species' homeworld, similar to this. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:14, March 18, 2010 (UTC)- Done. --Eyrezer 06:09, March 20, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 06:12, March 20, 2010 (UTC)