Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Coleman Trebor

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Coleman Trebor (+1)

Support

  1. nominated AdmirableAckbar 18:24, 3 July 2007 (UTC)
  2. Jediknight19bby 18:30, 3 July 2007 (UTC)
  3. user:DarthJawa

Oppose

  1. Please see my comments below. Greyman(Paratus) 01:30, 4 July 2007 (UTC)
  2. Per Greyman. Also, reading this article...it sounds more like an eulogy for the guy by one of his closest friends. The whole things borderline POV. We might as well tag it with {{glorious_hero_of_the_jedi_order}} and call it a day. --School of Thrawn 101 04:51, 4 July 2007 (UTC)

Comments

  • it's quite short but is fully referenced and seems to meet requirments AdmirableAckbar 18:24, 3 July 2007 (UTC)

I think this article could use a bit more work before it's ready for GA. There are two sentences which should be referenced—

  • "Along with Saesee Tiin, he commanded some Antarian Rangers and Jedi during the Confederacy's uprising on Antar 4." (Source?)
  • "After the Battle of Geonosis, Kit Fisto replaced the slain Master on the Jedi Council." (Source?)
  • "Trebor shared a close friendship with a Human female Padawan named Jyl Somtay, and they had many insightful conversations." This should be expanded to be more than one sentance—what type of conversations? What did they discuss? What's important about this specific friendship?
  • POV – "In unparalleled heroism", etc.
  • How big of a part did he play in Jedi Quest: The False Peace? If it was a substantial part, with important repercussions, then it should be expanded more than it already is. (addressed)
  • The writing, in general, could use some work as well. Greyman(Paratus) 01:30, 4 July 2007 (UTC)
    • His part in False Peace is very small: "When Obi-Wan looked down, he could see, far below, Jedi charging out onto the Senate floor. He saw Shaak Ti leaping onto the pods like steps, moving upward. A team led by Coleman Trebor used the pod controls to move closer to their goal, then leaped into the air to take out two, four, seven, ten seeker droids at once during their descent." I'll try and fix your other objections later. AdmirableAckbar 12:09, 4 July 2007 (UTC)