Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Chankar Kim

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Chankar Kim

• Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:17, June 14, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Next Yoda: Dark Rendezvous Jedi

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 03:30, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
2. ToRsO bOy 22:41, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
3. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:26, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
4. 1358 ^(Talk) 06:55, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
5. Trak Nar ^{Ramble on} 07:30, June 20, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Kilson

• For the first quote attribution, you should point out that Kim said this prior to the Battle of Geonosis.
  • Done.
• "Sometime before 22 BBY, Kim took Tallisibeth Enwandung-Esterhazy as her Padawan," you later said Kim took Scout as her Padawan three months prior to Geonosis, so it's possible Kim took Scout as her Padawan in 22 BBY. You should rephrase this as "Sometime around 22 BBY..."
  • Rephrased.
• Since you mention 22 BBY in the Intro, you must insert it somewhere in the Bio.
  • Done.
• You never mention in the Bio that Kim reached the rank of Jedi Master.
  • Added.
• "Three months after Kim took Scout as her Padawan,[1] Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi; his apprentice, Anakin Skywalker; and Senator Padmé Amidala were captured on the planet Geonosis." Captured by who? You should probably insert the Confederacy here.
  • Added.
• "However, the rescue mission turned into a full-scale battle. Kim fell in the fight, leaving Scout an orphaned Padawan with a case of survivor's guilt." You can combine these two sentences. Also, you should probably insert how the Jedi fought against the Confederate droid army.
  • Done.
• Just like in your Politrix nom, since you mention the release year of Yoda: Dark Rendezvous, you should also mention the release year for the CSWE.
  • Fixed.
• Otherwise, good job. It was an interesting read. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 00:46, June 15, 2011 (UTC)
  • Thanks a lot, that's the sense of it :P Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:36, June 15, 2011 (UTC)

ToRsO bOy

• You refer to Chankar's Padawan as Scout on the quotes, then Tallisibeth Enwandung-Esterhazy on the article. Can you make them match for clarity?
  • Fixed. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:40, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
• Also on the P&T, "Kim took Scout as her Padawan, although many Jedi failed to find the reason why." Can you insert an explanation why the Jedi were wondering Kim's choice? ToRsO bOy 23:05, June 15, 2011 (UTC)
  • Added. Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:40, June 16, 2011 (UTC)

Toprawa

• Please reload the infobox. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:58, June 17, 2011 (UTC)
  • Done. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 15:59, June 18, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:06, June 21, 2011 (UTC)